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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from McMann
Review:
More Please please please!!!!
Review By [McMann] • Date [26 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from unicornzvi
Review:
Very nice, I hope to see more of this soon. However, a few nit picks:

1>One thing that bothers me in many of the HL/SG fics, WHY does the immortal assume as soon as he hears the project name "Stargate" that it's the Chapa'i? I can think of half a dozen things it could be without reaching for something like that, and that's assuming the project name has any connection to what it actually is. The Pentagon has a computer pick names for classified projects on a random basis, and they're checked to make sure the computer didn't by chance select something connected to what the project is about. This results in project names like "purple Frog" (although they usually pick one s which don't sound quite that ridiculous) or "Stargate" for a project which forex. works on monitoring China's nuclear program.

2>Both 'Jack' and 'O'neill' are relativly common names so Buffy wouldn't assume Col. Jack O'neill was the immortal she knew unless she knew already he'd joined the military and was a Col. who'd started out in the SF.

3>When talking about Methos she refers to him as 'Adam' but when facing him calls him Methos in public, with several people she doesn't know in the room and the possibility of others overhearing. This makes no sense. The other way around would, as would simply calling him Methos always but not the way you have it.

4>It would take at least several hours to get from Sunnydale to Seacover (depending on where you decided it is). Buffy would have had plenty of time to explain all about being Immorttal to the Scoobies and they would have pestered her until she did all along the way.

5>I really hate how HL/BtvS have centuries old immortals not believe in Vampires. 2-300 years ago it would have been a perfectly resonable explanation and in the buffyverse there wouldn't have been strong evidence to convince them vampires don't exist (since they do) so they'd continue believing in them. It takes strong contrary evidence to convince people that the beliefs they grew up with were wrong so what happened to convince Duncan vampires don't exist?

6>Why would someone seeing a vampire's face morph immediatly start believing in vampires, aliens and deamons when a minute before he was adament they can't exist? That never made any sense to me.

The Unicorn
Review By [unicornzvi] • Date [2 May 05] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from Blaze
Review:
hi just wanted to say freat story so far. Also wanted to point out that you misspelled Jack's last name.

You wrote

"You're certain it was the Stargate and Colonel Jack O'Neil, one l?"

Willow nodded silently, unable to speak, Buffy swore quietly.

However it is 2 L's. This was made a big deal about because once he yelled out O'Neill with 2 L's but showed 3 fingers. Just thought you should know
Review By [Blaze] • Date [1 May 05] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from BigHead
Review:
Excellent fic, for now. More, please, and soon.
Review By [BigHead] • Date [1 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from malaskor
Review:
Hmm... interesting.
I'm not sure what, but something is rubbing me a bit wrong about this story - ah well I'll wait and see how it develops.
One other point that I would like to see explained in the story is: How did Buffy know that Jack is "her" Jack? Firstly the name is not really rare and secondly as an immortal he is bound to change his name(s) relatively often - depending on when they last had contact she couldn't even know that name.

Keep on writing.
Review By [malaskor] • Date [1 May 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from MarcD
Review:
This is a very good story...and I look forward to your next update...though there were two things...1) Why did Duncan throw the katana at Buffy's head while her back was turned? (That's not something I can really see him doing...but not all that important) 2) (This is more for fun) But I think you missed having Giles say "Dear Lord" in this chapter :-D

As I said before, excellent work. Please update soon!

mjd
Review By [MarcD] • Date [1 May 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Claddagh
Review:
Oh, come on, don't stop there!!!
Please?
Review By [Claddagh] • Date [1 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
I would give it an "interesting" with a side-order of "hmmm...". Seems to be a bit of unnecessary filler (Repeating the challenge and summarizing chapter 1 in chapter 2) but other than that - not off to a bad start.

About my only concern is that it is another one of those "Buffy is an old immortal who was very mean/nasty/violent several thousand years ago." crossover fics. That seems to be a common plot idea. And requires a bit of OoC-ness. You might want to tone her down as you go.

And it would be nice to have Buffy actually explain herself at some point. She can't keep avoiding things like that. Especially around someone like Faith, who only has so much patience as it is.
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [1 May 05] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from CassandraHunter
Review:
I really love this fic. I was wondering if anyone had even responded to this challenge. (They should have a little area in the challenges thing to see if anyone had responded to it.)
Review By [CassandraHunter] • Date [11 Apr 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from MusingsOfApathy
Review:
I like it. Good concept. I have bookmarked it in hopes that it has not gone dead. Please continue. With this concept it could be a long story or a short one. From five chapters on up.

Thanks for writing.

Mike.
Review By [MusingsOfApathy] • Date [13 Mar 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
Review:
Aweosme chapter!
Please post more soon!
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [15 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from Claddagh
Review:
I really like what you have so far, and am looking forward to your next update!
Review By [Claddagh] • Date [9 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from Alyson
Review:
Excellent introduction... I applaud thee. I was wondering if anyone was going to answer that challenge, because I was eyeing it, considering it would be an entertaining way to pick up both Stargate and Highlander in a crossover, both genres of which I have never done before. I might still answer it following my current projects.

I really wish for you to continue this, as there are many things left to see... Buffy telling off Jack for opening the Stargate for one, I am certain, will be worth reading. Continue on!
Review By [Alyson] • Date [8 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from Saphrine
Review:
Oh this is a great start and I can hardley wait for the next chapter!
Review By [Saphrine] • Date [7 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Three Warriors" from Lorency
Review:
OH MY GATE! PLEASE CONTINUE THIS ONE!

It is absolutly great and I like the idea of The Three Warriors.

Peace out!
Review By [Lorency] • Date [7 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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