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Review of chapter "Off to Work" from Ezmerelda
Review:
I'm really enjoying the almost father/daughter relationship developing between Dawn and Jack.

Thanks for writing! ~"~
Comments from author:
You spotted it. heh.
Review By [Ezmerelda] • Date [29 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Off to Work" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Sweet. Story-telling a little sketchy, but maybe you'll flesh out the chapters a bit more later?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [29 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Off to Work" from azulkan
Review:
Interesting, who would have thought the tokra or something like them had been in contact with the key. Looking forward to more soon, please.
Review By [azulkan] • Date [29 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome Wagon" from spacey
Review:
yes yes yes! the story is starting to go, to move somewhere! I think the bestestest part is jack ordering furnature for dawn. what's he gonna do, call it an advance on her first several paychecks? still, that is soooo sweet!
Review By [spacey] • Date [28 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome Wagon" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I like how you drew this chapter. The team needed to accept her no questions asked, but of course now that they are out of danger mode, they want to know more -- if only to be a better team.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [28 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome Wagon" from MusingsOfApathy
Review:
Great update and two in one day, I am impressed. Loving the story. Can't wait for more.

Oh, listen to me, demanding more updates when you have already updated twice in one day and now I want another, soon...very soon. Ok, so I am impatient for the good things in life. Sue me.

Mike.
Review By [MusingsOfApathy] • Date [27 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome Wagon" from azulkan
Review:
So Jack's gonna buy furniture! Looking forward to more soon.
Review By [azulkan] • Date [27 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Welcome Wagon" from immortalwizardelffan
Review:
This is such a hilarious fic. I can see Dawn wanting to get out of the house to make a lfie for herself without having to wait 20 min in line to use the bathroom. Love the overprotective Willow, Xander, Buffy and Giles. The part about Dawn calling D'Hoffryn to get Willow was pure genius. Jack in big brother/mother hen mode is hilarious. Kinda sweet how he's paying for and having furniture delivered to Dawn's new house.

Can't wait to read Carter, Teal'c, Daniel and Jack's reactions about slayers, the fact that Dawn is the 'Key of Dimensions' and about the initiative. Gonna make for some interesting convos between the five of them. And just wait till Daniel finds out that Dawn knows just about every language in the known universe cause she's the 'Key'. Please update as soon as possible. This is a great fic.
Review By [immortalwizardelffan] • Date [27 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Welcome Wagon" from Wise
Review:
The whole thing feels unnecessarily rushed.
Good potential for the idea, but you're flying through content that you should take the time to savor.

Also, your characters are a teeny bit OOC (especially on the SGC side) in that they tend to be very accepting of things that they should be questining. Also, dialogue like, "And for some reason, she makes me feel very protective," is nothing short of ridiculous. Remember that it's always necessary for your characters' talk to sound something like actual human talk that human beings might be likely to talk in the given situation.
Review By [Wise] • Date [27 Jan 05] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Meeting Dad" from Bunney
Review:
great job, though i'm not sure Giles would have left so soon. But hey you can't have everything can you :)

later and love
bunney
Comments from author:
Whose to say he won't be returning sometime?
Review By [Bunney] • Date [27 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meeting Dad" from CPTSkip
Review:
Lol! Nice for the SG1 team to meet Giles and Ripper all at once. Nice bit of threatening also. You have a nice touch with all the characters. More, please?
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [26 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meeting Dad" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Interesting and good. Thanks for adding the chapter.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [26 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Meeting Dad" from spacey
Review:
this seemed a little rushed but damn, it was nice to hear from giles!
Review By [spacey] • Date [26 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Paperwork" from Imp
Review:
This is an excellent story!!!! I'm so very glad I found it. SOmehow I can completley see Jack and Dawn getting along like a house on fire! And another person for Jack to mother hen over! Yay!
Comments from author:
Dawn can't escape the mother hens. Every where she goes, there's a mother hen. thanks.
Review By [Imp] • Date [26 Jan 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Paperwork" from Bunney
Review:
yay a new part again. very cool, i like that dawn will be living off base that ought to drive jack nuts.

later and love
bunney
Review By [Bunney] • Date [25 Jan 05] • Not Rated
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