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Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Vld
Review:
Loved that fight! Pretty amazing if you ask me! I wonder if, despite her strenght not being as enhanced as a Slayer's, she might not be better than Buffy ever was. Now, I wonder who Samantha's father was... I have a slight suspicion it may beMansfield, in which case, she's deluded in thinking he was a good man. I may be wrong, though.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Would this Dawn be able to beat Buffy? Or for that matter, would Kirika be able to do that? It's a question that has been asked several times and one that I've thought about quite a bit. To be honest, I think it depends on the situation. Both are trained killers, but if they had to fight each other to the death my money would be on Dawn because she doesn't have the same problem with killing humans that Buffy has.
In a training match I believe Buffy would win because Dawn would try to hold back too much because she wouldn't be sure how far she could go. In Noir there was only one training match shown and that was between the emotionless Kirika and Chloe. That match showed that if Kirika gave everything she could kill Chloe even during training (only stopping herself at the last moment), but Dawn wouldn't be able to go that far where it concerns training because emotions would stop her from hurting Buffy too badly.
In a fight against demons I think I'd go for Buffy as well. She was designed to hunt them, and even though Dawn has a lot more experience by now and better weapons, the fact that Buffy is the Slayer would be a psychological aid like no other against demons.
Against humans isn't even worth comparing as there is no doubt who'd be better at that. The trained assassin, or the protector of humanity.
So, as I said I think it depends on the situation.
Review By [Vld] • Date [6 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from Vld
Review:
Well, me again lol! First, as to why I review your story so often? Well, that's because your chapters are long, and I want to be able to say everything I think immediately. So, while I could try to read several chapters, then do one review, I prefer doing it that way. And I like your story (which, obviously, otherwise I wouldn't be reading it :D)
Well, that one won't really be long anyway. And it's a congratulation before anything else. One character I REALLY loathed in BTVS was Riley. And no, that's not a "thank you for killing him" review. You actually managed to make me feel sorry for him. Hell, you managed to make me want for him to survive. Or at least I would have loved to see him manage to get up and gut Mansfield... now that's a bastard I hope Dawn will get her crazy side deal with. I mean, what sick SOB would kill the parents and wife of one of the people under his protection? Nevermind the fact that he killed the widow and the children! Or how he treated his men! I really, REALLY hope he dies in 2003 and not in the future.
Now, since there wasn't any mentions of Dave, I must make the conclusion that she did kill him that day (June 11 was it?) and so I'm looking forward to who might be Jack's boss. Although I still hope it's the former street kid.
As for spoiling, I'm thankful you don't. Any theories I might write in here Are, in a way, a show of how much I like that story.
Comments from author:
Oh, don't get me wrong. I like getting reviews, so you can give them any way you want. :-)
Well, by now you've read some more about Mansfield, so I won't go into him here either. I am glad I made Riley look good for you though. It always feels great when I manage to make somebody like a character they didn't like on the show. Or at least feel sorry for them...
Review By [Vld] • Date [6 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from Vld
Review:
Well, reading this part, I've actually come to two conclusions about Dawn's behavior. Probably both false, but I have to point these out. The first one, she's actually playing, and giving her target a clue about who she is, I mean it is dangerous to let Logan know she is more than she seems. I don't remember anybody in the show ever figuring who Eyes Only was just by their eyes (Then again, I don't remember much of the show).
As for her play with Original Cindy, it's just baiting. Whether she just wants to use her, or she has something else in mind, so far I'm inclined to the former.
Now, my second conclusion: I think Dawn is tired of it, and deep down she wants it to end. But she doesn't want the government or the criminals to be the ones to end her. So she's actually, probably for the first time, giving hints to her target about who she is, to see if her target is worthy of killing her.
Probably really far-fetched, I know, but it makes sense in that weird mind of mine.
Comments from author:
You know, the way you keep posting reviews almost makes me feel inadequate because I don't answer them as fast :-)
You're right, nobody recognized Logan by his eyes and that does show him that she's more than just a simple (although successful) socialite. There's a reason for it all, and in the end I hope you'll agree that it works out pretty well.
As for your second conclusion, it's the first time I've heard it mentioned. I'm impressed. While it's not quite right, it isn't exactly wrong either. Sorry to be so vague, but saying more would only spoil things.
Review By [Vld] • Date [6 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from Vld
Review:
Aw shucks... I'm actually hoping she shot the pillows here... no, I'm sure she didn't! I can't wait to read the next memory part. Or when she meets the "Boss", because I'm convinced it's Dave.
Comments from author:
What can I say? Thanks for the continuing comments.
Review By [Vld] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Vld
Review:
Oh my... that was some good Noir, here! I wonder how many black ops projects she ended, but I guess I'll find out soon enough. I'm actually thinking Jack's boss is actually Dave, which would expain how he seemed to know her. I'll read more tomorrow.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the comments. And yes, you'll find everything out in the rest of the story. As well as something about the theories you mentioned in an earlier review.
Review By [Vld] • Date [4 Sep 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Past Donor)oldshoe
Review:
I just finished reading your entire seres, almost in one go, and am now an addict. The writing improves as you progress. I love the idea of multiple time lines, and dreams that have lasting effects since it leaves open the chance for more stores with incompatible cross-overs. One thing that I particularly liked in this story was the ambiguity over whether Dawn had killed Dave, and even whether Dawn admitted to her self if she had killed Dave. You did leave some loose ends, but this is a good thing.
Comments from author:
I'm sorry for getting you addicted.

No, actually I'm not. Thank you for your kind words though. I'm glad that it shows how my writing improves, after all it would be pretty bad if it didn't. And as for loose ends, well that's what sequels are for. Quite a few things from this story will be answered or explained in the sequel. Including some things you probably haven't even noticed yet.
Review By [(Past Donor)oldshoe] • Date [4 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Past Donor)Vega
Review:
I just reread your story (stories actually), it was great i really hope you're working on the sequel(s).
You're one of the most underrated (underreviewed) author here, keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I just got back from a short holiday, hence the late reply, but I'm working on the sequels and it shouldn't be too long before something appears.
Review By [(Past Donor)Vega] • Date [9 Apr 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Rakeesh
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Very, very excellent series. I don't think I even realized I like Dark Dawn fics until I started reading these. I love contradictions... and a little girl with the temperment/attitude of Riddick is definitely that.

I'm hoping your other stories back away from this future a bit, or at least are a bit AU from it. I wasn't quite expecting Dawn to end up on her own so quickly. There was a lot of interaction with her family I was hoping to see... the Green Lady, the confrontation with Glory (that would definitely be different!), and perhaps seeing how the fractured and absolutely hateful-of-magic Dawn would deal with learning she's a creature of pure magic.

But, it's not like you've painted yourself into any corners, so I'm looking forward to what's to come. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Yes, the other stories describe a completely different time-line, and the things you'd like to see are all in there. Of course, some of them will also be handled in the sequel to this one.
Review By [Rakeesh] • Date [20 Jul 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from Lorency
Review:
Oh no! You stopped here? NĂ³, no. I want to read more. Will this makes sures that I hang around here to wait for another chapter then.

peace out
Comments from author:
Yep, I stopped here. I'm annoying like that. Thanks for the review.
Review By [Lorency] • Date [2 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from Chaos
Review:
Wonderful story. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Chaos] • Date [1 May 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from Xelab
Review:
Another great chapter! Have I mentioned that I love your action scenes? Looking forward to the next installment (and hoping its not another flashback ;)
Comments from author:
Thanks, I don't know if you mentioned it before, but I appreciate it anyway. But... the next chapter will be a flashback one.
Review By [Xelab] • Date [1 May 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from Lorency
Review:
This is getting more and more interesting. A prophecy? And Dawn has to be there? It means she has a purpose to why she's killing and stuff. I sort of hope that she will become friends with Max.

peace out
Comments from author:
Thank you. There's not much I can say without spoiling things though, so I won't. The next chapters should answer some of your questions anyway.
Review By [Lorency] • Date [25 Apr 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Lorency
Review:
Awww, you can't stop here. What was Dawn's plan? Was she going to kill Max in cold blood? What happens next?

peace out
Comments from author:
Actually, I'm afraid I can. :-) But don't worry, while next week another "flashback" will be posted, the week after that you can be annoyed by another cliffhanger. But who knows? Maybe this one will be resolved...

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Lorency] • Date [17 Apr 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10" from Lorency
Review:
That was so cool. It's getting more and more exciting in the story and I can hardly wait for another chapter to come up. What will happen when Dawn comes face to face with Max? Will they try to kill each other? And who is Dave?

Peace out
Comments from author:
Thanks for the comments.
Let's answer some questions then. Dave is the same Dave from chapters 3 and 5, and my story Christmas Shopping. He's an original character, so if you don't recognize him from any show, that's why :-)
What will happen when they meet? Oh, I think that answer might show up in the story sooner or later...
Review By [Lorency] • Date [3 Apr 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from NEmo
Review:
Of course we like reading this fic. Noir is one of my fovirte animes ever. And I must say your story really does the anime justice. So PLEASE do not stop writing this. The mood is vastly different from most fics but this is not bad. In fact it is VERY good, as we all like to have some variety.

So, do go on!
Comments from author:
That's good to hear. I'm also glad that this its coming over the way it should. And for the mood, well like you said, always the same thing gets a bit boring after a while.
Review By [NEmo] • Date [26 Mar 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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