A very entertaining story. but since you are interested in reviews, here are my only 2 quibbles:
1.The endless Author Notes destroy the flow and take us out of the story. In a sense, you are repeatedly reminding the reader that this is not real. In any event, it becomes a distraction.
2. Be wary of making too many crossovers in a story. The problem with that is it's difficult enough for a writer to blend even two fandoms and keep things believable. The more extra fandoms you pile on, actually devalue the original two. After all, you have an intriguing concept for a story. Why dilute something that already has originality and charm?
Comments from author:
Yes, I know - one day I'll get off of my duff and actually fix the first chapter like I said I would years ago.
Review By [Wandmaker] • Date [15 Jul 07] • Not Rated
I like this. It is well written, mostly easy to follow, although I did get a little confused between the Xanders from different dimensions. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [dragonfan] • Date [14 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5, I think..." from Bluesnowman
Review:
Awesome update I can not wiat for more.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Bluesnowman] • Date [14 Jul 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Only the quality of the fun enabled me to get through the first section. There are so many authors notes in text. The first few could be mistaken for cute, but they became incredibly irritating.
That said, the 2nd and 3rd sections were great. The story was so much fun to read and the authors notes almost disappeared.
Its been awhile since the last update; please come back to this soon.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [23 Jan 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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