Review of chapter "The Ministry Guard" from Akalea
Review:
Let me just say: Cool! I think this was the best chapter so far, you have some very cool ideas. All the characters seemed absolutely perfect in their interactions. And this line was my favourite, I could just hear the way it would be said and found it really funny: "Yeah, him. And what's the deal with his name anyway? Last night, all anybody would call him is 'You-Know-Who', and Buffy was all 'No, actually we don't.'" Well, I'm really enjoying this story. Keep going, it's great :)
Review of chapter "The Ministry Guard" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I loved how unpredictable the plot of this chapter was -- with such excellent exploration of characterization. Well written, mysterious, amusing and entertaining. Thanks!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [2 Jun 05] • Not Rated
This is a lovely HP cross. It doesn't feel rushed as many others do. I like them when you take the time of merging the two worlds as opposed to plopping everyone in together as if they had always been there. Buffy's minor excitement over being 'mythic' was fun. Luckily noone pointed one of those wand things at Willow. It might have made her cranky. Will be interesting to see how Harry gets permission to see Dawn again. And I can't wait for the research party the Scooby's will begin on the Wand Wielders. Keep up the nice work!
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for the nice review. I'm trying to merge the two worlds as smoothly as possible, and it's always nice to hear that it appears to be working.
Because the story is told from Harry's POV (like Rowlings books are), you really wont get to see the research mode the Sobbies go into when they get back from Charing Cross Road. Just know that they did - stayed up rather late that night too - and found some info that was *very* interesting. ;)
Review By [KaylaShay] • Date [25 May 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Your struggles with writing this chapter were worth the effort, as you did a very nice job of combining the elements of action and characterization. I'm not quite sure where the characters were standing (in the street or on the side walk) while they had their brief revelations (nicely done on the Giles characterization by the way). And I'm looking forward to what will happen when Willow's status is discovered and what Willow might be able to do in the wizarding world. Thanks again for sharing this tale.
Comments from author:
Ah ha! I *knew* I should have kept that line about them all standing in the middle of the street as Miller was making his way over to them, but I just thought it was extraneous, and cut it out! :D Thanks for the note about it, and I'm going to put it back in now. :)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [24 May 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
I think this was a good start! The whole phone numbers part was nicely done and cute, and I'm looking forward to seeing how Dawn finds out about Hogwarts and Harry finds out about the Slayer.