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Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Wise
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An excerpt from Mark Twain's essay on the literary offenses of James Fenimore Cooper (the section dealing with the rules of writing). I have included only the ones that this story in particular seems to have a problem with.

4. The personages in a tale, both dead and alive, shall exhibit a sufficient excuse for being there.

6. When the author describes the character of a personage in his tale, the conduct and conversation of that personage shall justify said description.

8. Crass stupidities shall not be played upon the reader by either the author or the people in the tale.

An author should:

----------------->15. Not omit necessary details.
Review By [Wise] • Date [12 Dec 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from Discord
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Ok first off I want to say that I love your series! Love the names too very cute. Also i can totally see Willow going all Darth and evil etc. Don't really like her much. Would love her reaction if Buffy pointed out what would ber beloved Tara think of her actions? Any way as much as I like this fic I really can see Buffy being as obedient? submissive? docile? when it comes to The Council. She hates authority and I really can't see her calling anyone Master without a healthy dose of sarcasm. As for her using the dark side...that i can totally see. Not because she's evil or anything but Buffy has always used her emotions to help her fight. As she told Kendra her anger gives her power. So while she may touch on the dark side she'd never use it to do bad things. I like the whole losing an arm thing and i'm wondering whats gonna happen with Anikin now Willows gone dark instead of him. Is he gonna be a good little jedi now coz of Buffy of will he still sucumb to Darth Sidious' evil minipulations? Can't wait to find out and I hope you don't think I'm being to over critical or anything. I still love this fic it's one of the better Buffy/Star Wars crossovers. Keep up the great work!
Review By [Discord] • Date [5 Dec 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from CynthiaTaz
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Great story. I have never been interested in SW crossover until now. I kinda understand why Willow had turned dark, the time she had been kept as slave seemed to have done more damage then anyone could see, not to mention being away from her family and love ones for so many years. Oh, is Willow's name 'Traya' comes from the character in KotOR? Seems kinda fit Willow. Can't wait for the sequel. :)
Review By [CynthiaTaz] • Date [5 Dec 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 10: Epilogue" from jammiesMM
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Great chapter. I can see Willow turning dark because she wanted to get back home so bad I mean she turned dark when Tara was killed. She even "skinned a man alive" and then killed him so I see her being able to turn dark. But to me it makes Willow selfish when she starts talking about how it would be ok if Buffy died. Buffy lost more then just Dawn... she lost Xander, Giles and Tara too. What Willow wants now it seems is for her to go back and to continue like nothing happened. She wanted to be with Xander researching with Giles... well she wouldn't have been researching with Giles if Buffy was not there. Lets kind of face it the "Scoobies" wouldn't have had much of a "life" if they didn't tag along with Buffy. Plus without Buffy they might have been either vamps or vamp food. Now Buffy lost just as much as Willow I am glad she passed her trials I kind of figured she would because she rejected the dark side instead of giving in. As far as her loosing the arm well I think it makes it more real. Sure Buffy is good but she isn't "supergirl" no matter how strong & fast she is. She is still human and able to be injured so the arm thing doesn't really bother me. I look forward to the sequel.
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [4 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Good Friends, Better Enemies" from JennRosbury
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Two thumbs up...although Buffy loosing her arm ...snifff

And Willow this evil...hmmm curiouser and curioser

Love for Buffy??????
Review By [JennRosbury] • Date [29 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Good Friends, Better Enemies" from Drow
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Very good! I Can't wait for your next update.

Could the fact that Buffy has, on two occasions, used the "Dark Side" without loosing control be significant?
Maybe her status as a Slayer will allow her to safely use the "dark side" without it "using" her.
Review By [Drow] • Date [28 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Good Friends, Better Enemies" from grd
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everything was great up until Buffy lost her arm. Come on Slayer healing here. Guess you wanted Buffy and Ani to have a matching set.
Review By [grd] • Date [28 Nov 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Return of the Slayer" from LadyCarpathian
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You naughty, naughty person you!!!!

SO, do we have a Darth Willow or what??

More, please??? Soon????
Review By [LadyCarpathian] • Date [27 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Return of the Slayer" from nanlila2
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Oh this was a great chapter, I know I haven't reviewed before but I just wanted to say that your doing a great job. Willow's turn to the darkside confuses me though. I mean in the last chapter she was all good and now suddenly she's trying to kill Buffy? There wasn't really any lead up to it, it's just like she's demonically possessed or something. I've always been of two schools of thought on Darth Rosenberg, on the one hand she's funny and powerful as hell but on the other hand turning evil tends to strain your personal relationships, *looks afraid* It's going to turn out all right isn't it? Again great story I liked the first on you did but I LOVE this one. *smirks* p.s. Buffy plus Ben equals fun stuff man! *winks*
Review By [nanlila2] • Date [20 Nov 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Return of the Slayer" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
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awesome chapter!
i so didn't see Willow going evil!
Glad to see faith in the fic!
Looking forward to more
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [20 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Return of the Slayer" from Locathah
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Well... THAT was unexpected. And here I was getting all upset that you'd taken Buffy out of the final fight only to have Willow turn around and go all Darth.

Either she's a shape shifter and not actualy Willow... or your following BTVS Cannon and Willow's hair is about to turn black (and she's just been good at hiding it... for a very long time.)

I'm not sure which I'd prefer. The problem with the second is that Black haired willow can, frankly, kick Buffy's ass. It only took a wave of her hand to rip all of someone's skin off if I Remember correctly.

Though if she's a traitor I suppose it DOES explain why she didn't kick Dooku's behind. I don't think even Sidious is a match for Willow when she's in a bad mood.

My one disappointment is that, overall, only details have changed. All magor events have happened as they did in the original movies. At this point Buffy and Willow might as well not be here :/ Though I suspect you're planning on having those small differences make a big difference near the end (Anakin not turning to the dark side) I'd hoped Buffy would have a bigger impact on things in general.
Comments from author:
You have no idea how truly close you are in your assumptions. I know I've stuk very close to the movies so far, but rest assured- all that changes with Episode III. It will be similar, but several things will change.

And Willow will be explained next week. Stay tuned!
Review By [Locathah] • Date [20 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Return of the Slayer" from jammiesMM
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Great update. What is gonig on with Willow? Did she turn to the dark side or something. Oh this was a great chapter I loved how Faith was in it even if it was just kind of in the dream. Update agian soon please
Comments from author:
I missed Faith. Can't wait till she shows up again...

As for Willow..stay tuned...
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [20 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Dark Side of the Moon" from SaraB
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I love your story, and I was right there with you all the way, but the use of the word "frak" really got to me. It took away from your story, having these characters use words they would never have come in contact with. Willow could possibly, but Buffy would never. Battlestar Galactica would be a Xander thing, not a Buffy thing. Anywho, besides that annoyingly distracting word (really, i hate the overuse of it on BSG as well....) it is great.
Comments from author:
I must apologize for that- there are two reason I use 'Frak'. One is as a sort of tribute to something I've come to enjoy, and also because, while I curse frequently, I'm hesitant to have Buffy use the 'F' word in this story. I figured she'd find an alternative, and Frak ended up being that alternative.

Sorry if it bugs you. Maybe I'll switch to 'Frell'...
Review By [SaraB] • Date [14 Nov 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: Arrival on Geonosis" from grd
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Please write the next part soon! Dooko is sooo going to get his ass kicked by either Willow or Buffy. Wonder if Anakin can feel Buffy's pain. A Slayer in all her Glory is what Dooko will unleash. I hope he sings soprano before the end.
Comments from author:
You know, I never actually planned otu a Buffy vs Dooku. I might have to, though...
Review By [grd] • Date [13 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: Arrival on Geonosis" from jammiesMM
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Cool update!! This is a great story. I do hope Buffy will be able to recover from this. hopefully with Willow and Anakin they will be able to help her. I just hope Anakin doesn't loose it when he finds out. Please update soon.
Comments from author:
Oh, she'll recover....
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [13 Nov 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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