Oh, this is way too much fun to leave here. You have to get Willow and Daniel together or at least let her chase him for a bit. Also, it wouldn't be in character for Jack to leave things as they now stand. He would immediately go after Xander to find out just what the hell is going on.
Review By [hilarydilarydoc] • Date [13 Nov 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Cute story, lots of lol'ing. At times the narritive felt rushed so it was a little hard to follow. One glaring mistake was that even Daniel doesn't call her Samantha, she is always 'Sam'. good work in general. would love to read more of this.
Wow, I really got a kick out of this one. Please add more, a lot more. I would think that when Willow finds out that Jack wouldn't let Xander make his one phone call and had him to the nut house, that she would leave him a little "prize".
Review By [Dema] • Date [9 Oct 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
This was a good variation on three themes combined into one story; however in a few places the narrative seemed rushed which caused momentary confusions in point of view/who was talking/thinking/being talked about or thought about. I would read a revised, expanded or extended version of this story. Thanks for sharing the tale.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [8 Oct 05] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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