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Review of chapter "Miles to Go Before I Sleep" from Duchess
THAT is just so sweet and cute and FUNNY!!! *giggle fit* I love it to pieces and can hardly wait to see more.

The little bit about Jayne's mother acting like a giggly school girl around Shepherd Book was just hysterical. I loved how River blindsided Inara about Mal. *still snickering* Zoe loaning her necklace to River was just darling. *happy sigh* The way you wrote Simon made it totally believable that he didn't stand up and make an ass of himself during the ceremony and I really can't see how it could have gone any other way at that point. *still in shock* LOL

You are doing such a fantastic job on this story I'm just about jealous, wishing I could write this funny and interesting. You rock! *two thumbs up*
Review By [Duchess] • Date [12 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Floozies, Vixens and the Manner of Grief" from Duchess
Aw, this chapter was chock full of darling moments as well as angsty ones. I think River is fitting in just fine in the Cobb household and it looks like Jayne's family is able to understand her pretty good. I'd like to think that means Jayne could too with a little more effort on his part. *g*

I'm also in a tizzy wanting to know what is said in their wedding vows! *vbg* This is gonna be good, I'm sure and I can hardly wait until the next chapter. :):):)
Review By [Duchess] • Date [11 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering, Hootenanny, or a Shindig (part one)" from PrimitivePixx
I actually did a happy dance when Ma Cobb told Simon off!
Comments from author:
lol. I wanted someone to tell him off since the third or fourth chapter, but I couldn't find the right person. . .and voila, Ma Cobb had the stuff to do it.
Review By [PrimitivePixx] • Date [9 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Gathering, Hootenanny, or a Shindig (part two)" from (Past Donor)boo
This is amazing and I just love how you've given Jayne all these hidden depths. I think he's so interestinh now and I can't wait to find out more. The wedding is next, yipee.
Comments from author:
It's a gift/curse. I've got to save everybody, and make them tragic heroes. I don't know why.
Of course, I like to think Joss had/still has plans for Jayne as having depths, much like season 1 Cordy. He's loyal to Mal, has family loyalty and love to his mother, and even a fatherlike relationship with Book. Or, I just could be using my crack!gift/curse and seeing things that aren't there. See, there I go with the babbling.

Yup, the wedding and the big blowout that's threatening to come out are next. . .
Review By [(Past Donor)boo] • Date [9 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Family Matters" from AriChanda
I just wanted to say, I really have been enjoying this story. Firefly isn't a fandom I read in, and normally I stick to Xander x-over but this is really interesting. Keep it up.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I didn't start writing in it until last year and at that time only in crossovers, mainly because I didn't know it very well. But recently I've been on this whole kick, and all I seem to be able to kick out is Firefly. Babble, I do that a lot. This is one of those mutated one shots that I get into every now and again.
Review By [AriChanda] • Date [8 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family Matters" from DeeRose
I was so excited to see an update of this fic, and you didn't let me down. This is the first (and only) Jayne/River fic I've read but there is something so compelling about your stories that I had to give it a try. The dialogue is excellent, and the scenes are fun. I'm enjoying watching the development of the characters. Keep up the good work, I can't wait to see the next chapter.
Comments from author:
If you could see me, you would see the ginormus grin on my face. Seriously made my day. It's reviews like this one that make me glad I write fanfic. You pretty much hit all the key points that have me freaking out when I write them. My own worst critic of course, but still I always worry about it.

If anyone's interested in a good place to find good Jayne/River fics, I suggest the rayne_shippers lj. Awesome fic, and a great place to get feedback and cool stuff. I suggest reading anything by literarylemming, michmak, and walkswithheros for a start (probably forgetting someone, but those three are really good)
Review By [DeeRose] • Date [7 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family Matters" from Duchess
*giggling my head off* This is just priceless! I love it and hope you post another part soon. *vbg*
Comments from author:
thanks. this part was one of those that resisted the orignial plot and mutated. I get a lot of that. hmm. anyway, next part's up.
Review By [Duchess] • Date [7 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Family Matters" from (Past Donor)boo
This was great. Please continue.
Comments from author:
thanks. consider it done, next part's up.
Review By [(Past Donor)boo] • Date [7 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Tiny Thing Like That" from Duchess
I'm still enjoying this fic and thank you for addressing the ability to perform issue. LOL

I like Jayne's mother and sisters. It looks like he and River are starting to get along a bit now and I really hope nothing happens to change that. *crossing fingers*

Just had a thought, if Jayne has any enemies still about and they hear he's home, they'd better not come looking for a fight or River might give it to them huh? *vbg*
Comments from author:
Not many people got that she gave him, um, performance enhancing drugs. Or why Wash and Mal were laughing about Simon having it. I love Simon, honest. He's just such an easy target.

They are the biggest and best OC's I've done to date. I'm very proud of how shiny they turned out. Oh, you can look forward to a nekkid scene between Jayne and River in the very near future.

The past'll come to bite him on the ass, that's for sure.
Review By [Duchess] • Date [5 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Mama Cobb" from Calex
I love your description of Mama Cobb, she's just how I pictured her to be. And I love your Jayne, showing unexpected signs of honour and nobility that the others couldn't see. River chose well, and if they work things out, things could be great for them.
Comments from author:
I've gotten so many comments like that about Mama Cobb. makes me smile every time I hear it. er, or read it in this case. As for Jayne, he may be greedy and a bit slow, but I see the good in him. (well, I see it in everyone - I have this thing, this 'must save everyone' complex).
Review By [Calex] • Date [4 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Nightmare Seductions" from Duchess
I'm still confused. LOL Technically it shouldn't have "worked" if you get my meaning, but for the sake of the story I'll ignore that and just keep reading.

I'm feeling sorry for both Jayne and River at the moment. Any say yet in WHY she did this? I realize she just told Jayne she wanted Serenity to be safe, but how can getting pregnant do that?

Please post more soon? :)
Comments from author:
it was buried in all the rambling, but she thinks by getting pregnant and becoming a cobb instead of a tam, it'll somehow throw them off. . .yeah, see it sounded a lot better in my head.
They'll be looking for a single woman and her brother, not a family.

this part came off a lot more angsty than orignally intended.

as for more. . .most likely.
Review By [Duchess] • Date [2 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Just Unsettlin'" from CPTSkip
Your story just tickles me. More, please?
Comments from author:
Always glad to give a tickle or two.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [2 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Just Unsettlin'" from (Past Donor)boo
This is my second river/jayne fic I've read and I have to admit, it's strangely compelling like watching a car wreck. Intrinsically wrpng but somehow a must see. please continue. PS you have River down pat.
Comments from author:
Rayne shouldn't work, but they're so different it works. Of course, it's a ship that involves Jayne, so it's something I'll hop on board. . .and that sounded really bad.

Thank you. I do crazy/genius good. I don't know why, I'm not either.
Review By [(Past Donor)boo] • Date [2 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just Unsettlin'" from Duchess
How the heck does River do something like THAT and Jayne NOT know about it? *confused*
Review By [Duchess] • Date [2 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Baby on Board" from Irene
I really like this, write more!
Review By [Irene] • Date [21 Oct 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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