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Review of chapter "Of Secrets and Dinosaurs" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I've just caught up on a few chapters... I think I kinda like how Zoe suspects a set-up, when if there is one it is at the powers-that-be level.
But River might be a slayer. Cool. That and in addition to maybe "slayer-dreams" she can read Xander-dreams. I'd like to see a little more of Xander's thoughts about what is going on, and then maybe instead of explaining himself to another crew-member (too paranoid) we could find out a little of his recent past through his thoughts. Thanks for sharing the tale!
Comments from author:
*grin* Yeah, Zoe doesn't have much reason for trusting anyone she hasn't known for a long time. There will definitely be some more of both Xander's background and Buffy's nightlife stuff coming through over time. Hope you like what comes out and how it does when it comes!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [16 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Of Secrets and Dinosaurs" from Dragonhulk
Review:
Always knew Wash and Xander would get along, they are just too similar. Excellent chapter, keep it up.
Comments from author:
*nod* I think they're fantastic together-- glad you agree!
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [16 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Of Secrets and Dinosaurs" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Hope you're continuing to enjoy.
Review By [war] • Date [16 Jan 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from EAmethyst
Review:
I have been following this story on your LiveJournal and decided to read what I assume is the polished version here. Something bothered me about the scene in Xander's room when I read it before and I finally figured out what it was. Earlier you have a scene where Mal is showing Xander to the passenger dorm, but in this chapter you refer to the ladder into his room. The crew quarters on Serenity have ladders which serve as the doorway into the rooms, but the passenger rooms have sliding paper screen doors.

This is a very minor little picky thing, but I am really liking this story overall. I have been checking your LiveJournal several times each week looking for an update and am thrilled that you are now posting new chapters here.
Comments from author:
Ooh-- excellent point. Thanks for bringing it to my attention: I'll fix it. There's little enough time on the show spent on the passenger dorms that I forgot that they didn't have ladders down like the crew.

Yeah, I'm posting there, too (slowly), but am trying to do at least every few days here. Glad you're liking it!

(Fixed it. First I changed it to just inside the door, silhouetted against the light, but then Xander couldn't have seen the glare. So Mal's right outside:p Thanks again!)
Review By [EAmethyst] • Date [16 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Of Secrets and Dinosaurs" from DaBear
Review:
I think you have the Zoe/Wash dynamic about spot on, its very good!
Comments from author:
Great! That was one thing I was concerned about, and when I first posted on my LJ a couple people thought I might have her too overbearing, too controlling. I changed a couple lines verys lightly in this version, which I think helped, but I do think that when things come to safety, Zoe wins, and Wash doesn't get to argue much. Glad you think I got it pegged!
Review By [DaBear] • Date [16 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Of Secrets and Dinosaurs" from Mashell
Review:
Nice we get to meet Wash. Hehehe He's gotta be my favorite Firefly character. I hope you update soon cause I really like reading your story, so update soon!

-Mashell
Comments from author:
Mmm. Me too-- I love Wash. Glad you're enjoying, and hope you continue to!
Review By [Mashell] • Date [15 Jan 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from Lorency
Review:
Wow. This chapter made me go all...how could River know? Well she's a mind reader but it was so sweet of her to help him in the only way she could figure out.
Comments from author:
*nod* I find River really difficult to write because I never got a completely good feel for just how psychic or just how crazy she was. So I kinda chose my own level, varying slightly from day to day, and went with it. This was actually one of my favorite chapters to write, just because it was the first time anyone got close to Xander's past without figuring anything out...
Review By [Lorency] • Date [15 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks-- hope you like it, too.
Review By [war] • Date [13 Jan 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from Bill
Review:
OUTSTANDING! So very well done. Look forward to more, so please post often.
Comments from author:
I'll be posting often for at least a while-- then things might slow down a bit, but I hope to keep making reasonably decent progress till the story winds itself up. Enjoy!
Review By [Bill] • Date [13 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from Dragonhulk
Review:
This story rules! I love all of it and how you had Xander attack Mal. I can't wait for more, please hurry.
Comments from author:
*grin* I felt a little guilty using a little thing like actor to make a full chapter like that, but I really, really wanted to write the scene! It was just too fun. Glad you liked it, too.
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [13 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from dulcinea
Review:
Huh, Mal and Caleb were the same actor? I must be slow because I didn't realize that until this story. Interesting way of incorporating that little piece of trivia. You're doing a great job of bringing Xander into the Firefly world, and I can't wait to see what you have in store for him, River, and the rest of the crew. Good job. :)
Comments from author:
Yup, they were. And I just rewatched the last season of Buffy for the first time after seeing Firefly, and was practically in tears every time Caleb was mean:p I hate seeing Mal act like that.

Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [dulcinea] • Date [13 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Rude Awakening" from BrendanM
Review:
I'm still enjoying this.

Hope to see more soon.
Comments from author:
Glad to hear it, and more is coming:)
Review By [BrendanM] • Date [13 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dinner With the Crew" from (Past Donor)Mari
Review:
It will be interesting to see what place Xander carves out for himself here. The characters seem to be well written, and it's good to see that Xander's still practicing Scoobie discretion. That makes sense. Is River a slayer in your reality?
Comments from author:
Thanks! Glad the characters are falling together right. And yeah, Xander still knows how to keep his mouth shut-- at least with people he doesn't already know. As for River, I shan't say because I know some people who might glance over reviews and responses don't like spoilers. But I think I said at some point in my lj *laugh* Original version of ch29, I believe, before I totally redid 26-29. Or you can just wait and see.
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [12 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dinner With the Crew" from ashez
Review:
Uh, here's something I thought of while reading through some of the later stuff on your LJ...

Why not have his new eye be the cure for the poison? Maybe a certain demon (or the one who poisoned him in the first place) has an immunity to the poison. The demon eye doesn't have to get him powers, if you don't want it to. Actually, that might add to why it took so long to figure out how to cure it. Like he's not cured of the poison, but the eye is continually producing anti-toxins for it?

Ah, sorry for the annoying suggestions. It just occured to me and I thought it might be vaguely interesting. I'm looking forward to see what your new idea of the Councils motives are... I kind of like your "council motivated by fear" one. It seems more creative than the whole, 'evil organization' idea.
Comments from author:
No apologies, I love suggestions! In this particular case, I already know what's going on both with the eye and with the poison, so I won't take you up on it, but it's a pretty cool idea and if I didn't already have it planned out, I might take you up on it.

Glad to have the backup on the fear vs evil theme-- I think it's a lot more believable, plus those versions of the chapters are way better written and I'd hate to have to go back and do them yet again!

Thanks for the responses, and, again, apologies for offering suggestions are never necessary!
Review By [ashez] • Date [11 Jan 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dinner With the Crew" from Allyssiandra
Review:
Excellent story so far... I look forward to reading it all.
Comments from author:
Thanks-- hope you continue to enjoy!
Review By [Allyssiandra] • Date [11 Jan 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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