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Review of chapter "Dinner With the Crew" from Lorency
Review:
Great story. Love it. Hope to see more soon.
Comments from author:
Thanks, and you will!
Review By [Lorency] • Date [11 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dinner With the Crew" from Mashell
Review:
Nice I really like this fic! I can't wait to see what happens next!

-Mashell
Comments from author:
Thanks, updates should come regularly at least up through where I have it in my LJ, and I hope to make them reasonably regular even after. Glad you like it!
Review By [Mashell] • Date [10 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dinner With the Crew" from LillianB
Review:
Please, more! Nice to see a fic with the voices right. And I imagine there's at least one axe in that duffel bag, so I imagine Xander will have a whole lot more 'splainin' to do soon...
Comments from author:
Glad I got the voices right! It's tough not letting Xander fall into Firefly-speak too quickly, but so far I've mostly caught it before publishing. Thanks much, and I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Review By [LillianB] • Date [10 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Introductions" from ophite
Review:
I like it, any errors you found aren't disturbing me unduly.
Comments from author:
Thanks! There weren't many at this point, but I thought as the deadline loomed, there might be more, which I didn't want to have to correct quite so publicly as here. Which there were, so I'm glad I did it the way I did!
Review By [ophite] • Date [5 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introductions" from WriteTheGoodWrite
Review:
UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOOON!
Review By [WriteTheGoodWrite] • Date [26 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Introductions" from Sandi
Review:
Okay I've come back to read the whole thing several times. I am officially begging for more. You are fantastic (feeding the muse stroke ego for several more lines). I'm in a mood. What does his eye do? It has to do something. What can River tell him about what happened? Try not to flashback too much. It jerks out of the mood. (Not something you are doing, just something that jars me). I have a personal library of books that I revisit so rereading this is premo praise. 9 cause life is interfering with you updating. Totally get that but if kudos help, I'm sending them.
Comments from author:
*grin* Thanks! *ego purrs under attention* His eye doesn't precisely do anything, but, well, you'll see. It will come out in time. River's funny-- she doesn't exactly know what happened, or at least, if she does, she doesn't know that she knows. But she tends to pick things up from people around her. I agree on the flashback thing-- not a fan of them at all. Significantly later in the story, chapter 27, I believe, though it might be 28, is one big flashback-- I'll be interested to see if you think it helps or harms. I don't think it's too bad (and as I say, I tend to really, really hate flashbacks) because basically its a description of events while Xander explains what happens, so you see the actual scene rather than his description of the scene. But -- tell me what you think when you see it:)
Review By [Sandi] • Date [24 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Introductions" from Vld
Review:
Wow, that's a really nice story you got there! Love the way you're picturing Xander. How did he appear in the future? And you say you did mistakes, which, I don't remember seeing any. Although, if you mean you made mistakes based on Firefly, although I have seen the entirety of the show last week-end, it was only the once, so... but so far, I'm quite impressed! Hope you manage your 50000 words. That story's more than worth it so far.
Comments from author:
Thanks! And I'm glad my mistakes weren't too big-- at that point they were just little niggling spelling and grammar things, but late in NaNo, I totally redid four complete chapters, so I'm glad I didn't do that here. I did, indeed, make my 50k words (debatably), but there's still significantly more plot to cover, sadly, it will be coming more slowly, since I don't have a deadline and I do have other stories that people are demanding updates on, as well:) But up to chapter 29 will be posted one every couple days for a while.
Review By [Vld] • Date [17 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introductions" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
I like it, even if it is a bit short!
Comments from author:
Ah, but short things can grow:)
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [8 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Talkin' Nonesense" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Excellent chapter. You really should have had Jayne looting the downed fighters tho'.
Comments from author:
Fair point-- he'd probably do that. On the other hand, there wasn't a lot of time, and Kaylee would have been furious if he'd insisted on doing it before getting Xander to help...
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [8 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Introductions" from (Past Donor)GACTsevil
Review:
I love it.
Is there a reason behind Xander's eyes, is he part vampire or something? Are we going to learn more about how he woke up?
Comments from author:
Yup, there's a reason, but nope, he's not a vampire. And, yeah, significantly more details about his waking come with time!
Review By [(Past Donor)GACTsevil] • Date [8 Nov 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Introductions" from WhiteWolf
Review:
Good story, but I have to say that Xander is a little bit too relaxed.
Comments from author:
Glad you like it! And I'd argue that Xander isn't as relaxed as he's acting, but acting relaxed is almost a defense mechanism.
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [8 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introductions" from Duchess
Review:
LOL I love how you're writing the crew of Serenity, but Xander seems to be picking up their speech patterns too quickly. You might want to pull back on that a bit.

Excellent part! Looking forward to more. :):):)
Comments from author:
Yeah, I've tried to watch out for that but it's hard going back and forth between two such different speaking styles. I'm going to stop publishing here for the moment because I don't have time to fix all these niggling little screw-ups, and just post to my lj till the end of Nov when I have time to edit the whole thing more carefully -- at that point I'll fix Xander's speaking and a bunch of the other dumb little things. Thanks for the response! And feel free to check out out the lj if you want the barely-edited version prior to December (which will be in about the same condition as what Iv'e posted here) -- currently up to chapter 11.
Review By [Duchess] • Date [8 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introductions" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Really liking how you are developing this. Looking forward to perhaps some AU action in your plot. Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Hope it lives up to expectation as the universes merge...
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [7 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introductions" from banner
Review:
The conversations are perfect - and I love the way Xander answers the questions without giving away secrets.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I figure after living on hellmouths and having to explain away various insane things, he's had plenty of opportunity to learn.
Review By [banner] • Date [7 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introductions" from ElaineRhodes
Review:
Anothe great chapter. I like Xander's assessment of the Alliance - accurate, yet snarky at the same time.

"Whole bundle of strangeness, this Xander." - Yeah, but that's why we love him!

Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
*grin* Thanks! Xander might not be Willow, but he has a definite level of seeing into things and summing them up. Glad you're enjoying!
Review By [ElaineRhodes] • Date [7 Nov 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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