Review of chapter "Making a List, Checking it twice" from PsychoWing
I'm still reading through this (and loving it), but I just thought I'd point out that in this chapter (9) you have Sally as being a slayer when in a previous chapter (5) she wasn't - Sara is (7). Anyway, I'm going to finish reading the story.
Review By [PsychoWing
] • Date [16 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Blood" from SledgeHammer
Hell yeah - The Speech was overdue - in fact, long overdue. Alfred should have given it to Batman after dealing with the Joker the *second* time, as the Kents should have after the second confrontation between Superman and Lex (or even the *first* confrontation with Braniac). and before you wonder what Alfred Pennyworth and Johnathan Kent would know about that sort of thing, wake up - both fought in World War I. While WW I was not as messy as WW II, war *period* is a messy business, and even Big Mistake Number One was not as clean as people thought, for all the lack of the powerful tanks and bombs actually used in Big Mistake Number Two. Iin fact, in DC Universe Prime, neither has gotten the Speech *yet*. (That I don't get *at all*.)
Review By [SledgeHammer
] • Date [4 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from CageFire
This is a really interesting story. The whole kill the supervillians already thing isn't exactly new, and frankly I don't think it's truly about morals, it's simply if every superhero killed every madman out there who went too far, then they'd have to keep inventing more and more supervillians instead of being able to reuse them over and over. I mean it's not just the superheroes either. I mean with all the crap that the joker has done, all the people he's killed, why has a police sniper never put a round through his head? Or for that matter, why hasn't a cop ever put a bullet in him before when he was arrested? Some of them might say "Damn my career, I don't care if I go to jail, that madman has to die!" It's all simply for the matter of if all the worst villians are dead, the only ones left will be the small fries, and they're not as interesting. I mean they can claim it's all a moral stance, which part of it might be, but it's also just good business.
Review By [CageFire
] • Date [29 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from trongod
I was happy to see that your Muse is bugging you into writing a sequel to this, and that Faith was pushing her way into the story - 'course, I immediately put in a vote for a faith and dawn team up to rescue their Boytoy Studmuffin from all those hussies in the DC 'verse, but hey! you have to admit the man deserves the Dark Slayer and The Grown Up And No Longer Jail Bait Key!! Your messages said that Xander is 23-25 in your Muse's mind, so that puts Faith at 21-23, Dawn at 19-21 (I think...)
Especially after the things he's gone through so far just in this story... Although I wouldn't mind your Muse letting Lauren save the newspapers and the award Gordon and the rest of the honest Gotham cops gave to Xander for his putting down two rabid monsters... Or he dance where the girls ALL insist on multiple dances with Xander as Diana, Barbara, Zatanna, and Pat laugh between getting their own dances with him, teasing him in SO many ways... And Cassie alternately defended him and teasing him as well as she laughs, to Xander's great satisfaction...
Hmm, maybe have Kara and Galatea show up to see for themselves the 'mortal' that has had such an inordinate effect upon their world; not sure what other spandex femme fatales are around other than Black Canary (too old and with G.A.), Huntress ( also occupied)etc.
Review By [trongod
] • Date [19 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from deamon
Hey are you ever going to write a sequel to this? I really want to see what happens when he confronts his friends when/if they find him. Maybe his home dimension is destroyed and they escape to where he is or something. Plz plz plz write a sequel.
Review By [deamon
] • Date [8 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from Stormguard
Very nice indeed.
Review By [Stormguard
] • Date [12 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from Dragonelf
I have reread this story again and I hope that you one day will get inspired to write a sequel.
::Gives the plot bunny a slice of Apple Crisp::
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Freedom means the opportunity to be
what we never thought we would be.
- Daniel J. Boorstin
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Review By [Dragonelf
] • Date [8 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from malchance
Please, please, please, please, please....MORE!! *gets down on hands and knees offering cookies and bribes*
I just read this story straight through and I absolutely loved it. It is one of my absolute favorites. I was completely drawn in and almost forgot that I was reading a story. I especially loved your strong, confident, and secure Xander. I would love reading more stories in this 'verse. It has so much potential and there are no limits to where you can go with it in the future. Can't wait to read more of your stories.
Comments from author:
I wish I could figure out where to go... every time I start it is just a rehash of the reality Xander shoved down their throats.. might have to go back and show what is happening in his old world.. but at the same time, there are people in the JLA very UNHAPPY with the reality Batman and Superman have faced... so... ~sighs~ my muse hates me of late.
Review By [malchance
] • Date [19 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Enter JLA" from deamon
I love this story and would love to see a sequel. Maybe about what happens in his home dimension after he left or if they find him or give him some romance or something. (I would love to see him with galatea or diana's sister (cant remember her name).
Review By [deamon
] • Date [9 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from gingerkid
awesome story, though it needs a sequel, please tell me what happens between him and Z...
Review By [gingerkid
] • Date [26 Feb 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hard Truths" from Theory
Evidently Xander hasnt read kingdom come and what happens when the heroes take a more hardline with villains, in the end no matter how you justify it, killing is wrong and it only leads to more killing. I love the story but the attitude seems wrong to me.... not to mention the heroes would never be able to operate if the killed people, they would be hunted down as vigilantes and murderers.
Review By [Theory
] • Date [13 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from Ancalador
A very enjoyable story. While I'm curious to see how things would have changed long term I understand that that was a reasonable place to end the story.
Keep up the good work.
Review By [Ancalador
] • Date [3 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from msdarque
I really liked and enjoyed reading this story! It's fun, thrilling, bit mysterious.. fantastic all around.
Congratulations and lots of stars! :D
Review By [msdarque
] • Date [26 Jan 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from mountainelements
This is an interesting read. I doubt that Willow and Buffy would fall so far as to tell a bunch of minors to sleep with Xander, but I understand that you wanted to give Xander a reason to leave. I like how Xander makes the superheros think about how many people die because they don't kill ANY of the supervillians.
Question: Why are so many of the Slayers staying at the school when Xander wanted to limit it only to the people who really needed it as there are space issues? Are so many of them orphans? You mentioned reasons for some of them, but I didn't get why the tomboys are boarding there.
I like how Xander kills the Joker and then starts planning a dance to divert any crushes. Here's hoping that you write a sequel. :)
Review By [mountainelements
] • Date [5 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Death of the...." from WildMartin
Just re-read this and decided to comment. I know I agree about the Joker and Lex, but there have been realities where the JLA have made themselves Judge, Jury and Executioner before...they were called the Justice Lords and they kind of ruled the planet with an iron fist. No deaths, but also no freedom. So I think I know what Batman is so terrified of is the slippery slope. A masked vigilante has no right taking a life because that is putting himself above the law. Taking the law into your own hands is illegal. Batman could technically be arrested for what he does now, if he weren't in so good with Gordan. If he were to start taking lives, even of the worst offenders that would no longer make him a protector of innocents but a punisher of the guilty. The real breakdown with Batman's rogues is that the police are so ineffective. A cop should have put a bullet in the Joker's head a long, long time ago. I know we have laws that prevent the execution of the mentally unstable, but I could see a Gotham DA challenging that law (to the Supreme Court if necessary) in regards to an un-containable threat, which is what the Joker is. On a different note, I think Buffy and Willow were a little too out of character; you could have justified Xander's leaving just from feeling the need to help the new slayers without completely vilifying almost everyone in his old life (honestly, the offer of underage minis to "service" Xander really creeped me out). Overall, I liked your story. It flowed well and was entertaining and you put a much needed new perspective to the DC characters' eyes.
Review By [WildMartin
] • Date [31 Oct 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]