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Review of chapter "Chapter 3 You Can Never Hide From Your Sire" from TimeTwist
Just noticed your answer to the previous poster. Definitely agree with you on not going into a big exposition, rather describe the differences over several chapters. As for how Forever Knight vampires die. I don't believe the show said much on that, but based off the two seasons of DVD's I have and from what I remember of the third season, nothing happens to the body when they are staked, and they may even be able to survive this. Divia, LaCroix' sire and human daughter. even survived beheading.

LaCroix survived being staked and burned by Nick in the first season. About the only way it seams to be able to kill them is by fire. Several died by letting the sun burn them to death, and several were burned in fires. They aren't immune to science either, since a faulty AID's cure killed several in the third season. I don't think even they know all their powers, Divia was able to stop other vampire's from healing when she attacked them, and almost seemed able to control other vampires, probably something her ancient master taught her.
Review By [TimeTwist] • Date [15 Dec 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3 You Can Never Hide From Your Sire" from TimeTwist
Not a bad start so far. Definitely hope you continue it, there aren't enough Forever Knight crossovers here. Definitely like that you brought in Drucilla. Can't wait to see how Nick reacts to Drucilla. She could definitely cause some problems, especially with Nick's type of vampire, who don't tollerate vampires, or mortals either, that threaten their code of secrecy. By the way are Vachon, Tracy and Screed alive in this story. I didn't like that all three were killed off so soon after they showed up, especially Screed. Although Tracy wasn't much of a loss.
Review By [TimeTwist] • Date [15 Dec 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3 You Can Never Hide From Your Sire" from VillageOrchid
This is a little different from what I expected, but you're doing a good job at following through on the elements. Nick knows that there are different kinds of vampires -- what he doesn't know as well is that while his "beast" is metaphorical in nature a set of desires and compulsions, the type of vampire that Liam is has a literal deamon (from another dimension or hell dimension) inside. Also his kind doesn't turn to dust, I don't think. They just age to the age of the corpse.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I knew that I needed to follow up on elements, it's just that I thought seemed awkward if I tried to shove everything in the first chapter. I like to explain things, but I don't want it to seem forced, a blatant exposition. I hope it flows nicely. This story hasn't been as easy to work out as my other fic on a Willow/Cole relationship.

As to what happens to Nick's type when staked, they don't age or anything. I can't remember exactly how they go... but I believe it's quite similar to the Buffy-verse. They actually burn in a very similar manner. But it's been a while since I've seen the show.

You do explain the "demon" differences very nicely though. I liked that.

Thanks again for the nice words.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [15 Dec 05] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 A Slayer Visits The Doctor" from Lucinda
lol... Now they'd best hope none of their cases keep them out past sunrise. And Buffy's indignation about a vampire NOT knowing who she is - very amusing.
Review By [Lucinda] • Date [12 Dec 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 A Slayer Visits The Doctor" from Wise
In a word, bad. In two words, very bad.

Everyone is majorly OOC, but most especially Buffy and Angel. Sure, they're NAMED Buffy and Angel, but the Slayer and the Vampire-with-a-soul we know and love are nowhere to be found in this fic. I read your characterisations of Buffy and Angel, and I think to myself, "I've never seen these people before in my life."

Furthermore, you completely failed to address the very large differences between vampires in the Buffy-verse and Vampires in Forever Knight (Forever Knight vampires, for example, can fly [among other things], and are not inherently evil).

You also lose points for resorting to the old cliche of 'the claiming mark.'

I suggest a rewrite. Or two. Maybe three.
Comments from author:
Hi! Thanks for the review. I only have just started writing fan fics. So, I really value these critiques. I actually feel depressed if I don't get any reviews. I don't care if they're bad or good. (Well, actually it's nice to see the good ones.)

Yes, I know about the difference in the vampires. I was thinking of covering that in later chapters. Almost every show that has ever had vampires has had them with different characteristics. (For instance, in Charmed, all you had to do was kill the queen vampire and they all die.)

As to being OOC, I can't tell you how many fics I read where I thought they were OOC. I think everyone has their own idea about what the character is supposed to be at heart. (For instance, I think it was OOC of character how Buffy just completely turns her back on Angel in the final season of "Angel".)

I think that two chapters is hardly enough to be judged on some of your complaints. However, thank you for the comments on "the claiming mark." I've always liked this idea of making a mate, but perhaps you're right. It can be overdone.

Please keep looking at future chapters and tell me if you see any improvement.

I really wasn't sure of this fic, it's not my main one. I was surprised at how many people out there are still interested in Nick Knight.

Thanks again!
Review By [Wise] • Date [10 Dec 05] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 A Slayer Visits The Doctor" from immortalwizardelffan
LMAO! Oh God this is hilarious. I love the dynamic between the two couples so far. I can't wait to read LaCroix and Jeannette's reactions. I'm guessing that Willow found a way to give Angel his soul permenantly? And that the whole season 5 with Glory never happened? Anyway, I am loving this, can't wait to read more. Update soon!
Review By [immortalwizardelffan] • Date [10 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 A Slayer Visits The Doctor" from hilarydilarydoc
Brilliant idea for a crossover. I'm really looking forward to reading how this story develops. I'm especially looking forward to LaCroix's reaction to Angelus mated to "The Slayer."
Review By [hilarydilarydoc] • Date [10 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2 A Slayer Visits The Doctor" from Nightscream
Hmmmm....well its funny and i did enjoy it....soooo yeah! looking forward to the next chapter. Good work keep it up.
Review By [Nightscream] • Date [10 Dec 05] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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