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Review of chapter "Phone Home" from Orion
Review:
Couple things.

First off, i find the concept that the asgaurd know about the supernatural interesting.

However, in general, i find myself hard pressed to like this story. Andrew was right that Dawn was more than just family, but Xander was right that they are her family too. You've had her leave that which should be most important to her - her family. She's changed her name, her attitude, and world. To me this means she's a coward running away.

On that point, I've also found that mostly when an author writes a fic where a character's name changes, along with a sudden change in attitude, it might as well be an origninal fic with original characters. You've let nothing of Buffy remain, so i'm not sure why you had her be Buffy to start with.

On a smaller note, Thor's comment of the fight against the false gods being 'more important' - it seems to me if Armageddon comes, that's it for everyone everywhere. On the other hand, even if Earth is taken over, the human race is still thriving around the galaxy.

So i guess i've made it clear i don't like this fic much. Sorry. On the other hand, I do find myself interested in seeing where you go with this, and how much SG1 you involve, and more so how much of the Scoobies you involve.

I apologise for this, i usually don't leave negitive reviews. However, this stuck me as something i needed to comment on. I think that I have a good job of being negitive without being a jerk, i hope you agree.

Either way, good luck on the rest of this.
Comments from author:
Watching Dawn die broke Buffy, it was the last straw for her. You should also remember that it has only been one or two days since the Scoobies kicked Buffy out of her own home. She fought along side them that doesn't mean that she would have turned to them in the end.

There is a reason for the name change and why the character is changing so much, which is part of the story. I love the character of Buffy and only write Buffy crossovers. I try to stay true to the character, or if I change the way that she is behaving I try and provide the reasons for her actions within the story as it unfolds.

This story has several surprises, which I guess you won't get to read since you don't like it and I'm sorry about that. Each person has there own personal preferences and they have to make there own choices. I do want to thank you for being polite in your review and good luck yourself in your own reading and in the New Year.
Review By [Orion] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Phone Home" from JasonBarnett
Review:
What bad thing did Xander say? He just said that he viewed Buffy as family as well and assumed she did, too? They lost Buffy and Dawn in the same fight, Buffy apparently unnecessarily and he's not supposed to be upset.

And Thor's whole keep the strength, throw away the weakness line? Well, first of all it sounded contrdictory. Maybe the people in the SGC are supposed to be better friends? Don't forget Jack was able to fool everyone into thinking he had gone bad, so he's good at acting and hiding his emotions. Sam can get to consumed in her work. There's other issues with the rest of them. Secondly it sounds more like the way an Ancient woudl phrase things to me.
Comments from author:
It's more that he was upset that she chose not to share her pain with him, 'her family', ignoring the fact that she lost the last remaining 'real' family member that she had. Not to mention that only the day before they kicked her out of her own home. Yes, Dawn was part of that, but she is/was a scared child. The Scoobies fought along side Buffy all these years and in the last greatest fight suddenly don't trust her to lead them.

As far as SG-1 goes, I did explain that although I am not an expert, I relied on several betas who are avid fans. The characterization of Thor is not canon and I do know that, but there is a much broader and darker reason for that pivotal to the story.

I'm sorry if you don't like the way that the story started or is going. If you choose not to continue to read, I will fully understand. If you do then I will look forward to your future reivews.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [31 Dec 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Phone Home" from SlayerBunni
Review:
brilliant start to the story. what an original idea. i can't wait for SG 1 to meet her and find out how she kicks Goa'uld butt. UPDATE VERY SOON PLZ! SlayerBunny
Comments from author:
Thank you. I promise that when they meet there will be lots of surprises.
Review By [SlayerBunni] • Date [31 Dec 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Phone Home" from WhiteWolf
Review:
I'm not really liking the cold Buffy or Thor's explanation of grapping Buffy to fight for his cause. Although I liked the black eyes.
Comments from author:
Sorry that you don't like the way the story is going. Did you mean you mean grabbing? A person tends to shut down when they see their last remaining family member die in front of their eyes though. Thanks taking the time to review though and have a great day and a happy New Yeat
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [31 Dec 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Phone Home" from jammiesMM
Review:
hey I read this over at your site its great!!!
Comments from author:
Thanks jammies. Sometimes I post stories over here since this is where I posted my first story.
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [31 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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