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Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from wargear
Review:
Very nice. Not quite heaven? I'd say that its pretty bloody close to heaven for Buffy.
Review By [wargear] • Date [2 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from alexceasar
Review:
Okay i so did not see that coming. I can only assume the child is adopted or Buffy's by a villager she fell for. Very good cliffhanger. I am gonna bite my nails until the next update. Good work on giving her history while on the planet so far.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I seem to have really gotten everyone with my little twist. All will be revealed in the next chapter. Okay maybe not all but some. ;)
Review By [alexceasar] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
I like the writing in this story a lot better than that in your Highlander crossover (which had way too much going on IMHO). I think your style, so far, works better with uncomplicated plots. If you can keep it going like this, it'll be a good fic, not just decent.

As far as pairings go -- Like Tassos, I don't see any reason to have a pairing with one of the SG-1 crew. Spend your time on Buffy, her relationship with the people she has been helping, her daughter (real? adopted?), and how she's going to get home (assuming she wants to get home). And don't spend much time on the Scoobies. I don't think they need much time in this story (or at least not until she goes home).
Comments from author:
Thanks for the input I really appreciate it. I'm trying hard to keep this one pretty straightforward. This is a story about whether or not Buffy can go home again - or maybe she is really home already.
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from silverdreamfics
Review:
Great story so far I can't wait to read more.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you like it.
Review By [silverdreamfics] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from rutterla
Review:
Whoa, where did the kid come from? That threw me. Can't wait for the next chapter to see who the little girl is.
Comments from author:
Surprise! It's a girl.
Review By [rutterla] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from Alyson
Review:
Well, well... this is excellent! I am actually fascinated about the story behind Buffy's defeat of Ba'al's Jaffa. Daniel is as curious as ever. Jack is as snarky and sarcastic as ever. We have yet to really see Sam's or Teal'c's reactions. As for a pairing, don't worry about it - although I'm hoping there's a fascinating story behind Buffy's daughter. About the pairings, don't worry about it. You know we'll read it no matter who you choose. Thank you for your frequent updates, too. This has been an enjoyable evening of reading.
Comments from author:
There'll be more Sam and Teal'c. I think Sam and Buffy would be good friends - and Buffy and Teal'c are kindred spirits with the whole warrior thing.

I'm glad you like the story.
Review By [Alyson] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from SamDragon
Review:
Mommy,didn't see that one coming.Good work.More please.
Comments from author:
Thanks I like a little twist.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "First Contact Doesn't Go So Well" from Tassos
Review:
I like this. It reads a little rough and fast, but I think the story idea is good and solid. Two things that jumped out at me and rubbed me the wrong way: 1) the chapter title has the incorrect use of good. It should be the adverb "well", because it describes how it "went", a verb.. It makes me feel like I can't trust your writing and I want to because the story draws me. 2) You mispelled Jack's last name. In TV canon, it's spelled with two "l"s - "O' Neill." I'm not a spelling nazi - my own is atrocious - but since it's a character name, it made me jump out of the story.

You mentioned a correction to the time frame in an author note in chapter one. I just wanted to remind you that you can edit your story chapters once they are posted so you can go back and fix it. (You can also put the disclaimer upfront instead of in chapter two which might be better to ward off roaming mods .)

As for voting for a pairing - why have a pairing? Beyond lust, what will Buffy and whomever see in each other? But that's just my opinion so please feel free to disregard it. It's your story after all. At this point I'm simply interested to see where you're going with this. It's an interesting premise and I hope we get to see into the changes Buffy underwent from when she first arrived on the planet to where she is now. Chapter 3 made me doubly curoius. (Maybe a duel story? pretty please? Ahem. I'll stop begging now.)

So thanks for this bit and I hope to see more soon.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the spelling tip. I fixed it. I can't believe I spelled it wrong. I swear there's at least one episode where he makes a point about spelling O'Neill with two LL's.
Review By [Tassos] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from spk
Review:
Okay...that was unexpected! She has a daughter?! WOW! What to do...what to do?! :)
Comments from author:
Can't stand can you. I'm a mean, evil author. Just love to throw my readers for a loop.
Review By [spk] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from jammiesMM
Review:
Oh wow! Great chapter!! And you really threw in a twist with that last bit. I never expected that. Loved Buffy's comment about the "snarky one" LOL Not much else to say right now you are doing great I do look forward to when Buffy tells them she is from earth and will she tell them about the "scary things under the bed" that she used to to fight? And if she does what kind of smart remark Jack will come up with.
Comments from author:
Liked that little twist did ya?
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Stories and Surprises" from BeatriceOtter
Review:
Great story! There's not enough Teal'c romance out there. Really, I'd love to see T get the girl for once--if nothing else, he's right about the age Buffy tends to like her guys (i.e. at least 100 yo). If not him, Daniel and Jack are about equal in my view as romance prospects. I guess I can see Jack as more her type, but I can see her with Daniel almost as well.
Comments from author:
He did get the hot Jaffa chick on the show. But you're right about the age thing. I'm still waivering.
Review By [BeatriceOtter] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Contact Doesn't Go So Well" from ElfgirlJen
Review:
I'm enjoying your story so far.
Please update soon
Comments from author:
I'm glad you like it. I'm working on chapter 3 right now.
Review By [ElfgirlJen] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Contact Doesn't Go So Well" from (Past Donor)Mari
Review:
This is off to an interesting start. Is Buffy in her own reality, or an alternate? The more formal way of speaking makes sense, and so does the interaction of the characters so far. Just out of curiosity--did the Scoobies not try and retrieve Buffy? Will they be making an appearance?
Comments from author:
Still her reality.

All will be explained with the Scoobs.
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Contact Doesn't Go So Well" from magicalbookworm
Review:
Very good so far! can't wait for more!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you like it. Look for another chapter soon.
Review By [magicalbookworm] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "First Contact Doesn't Go So Well" from alexceasar
Review:
Jack never does know when to keep his mother shut does he? Very good characterizations. Good plot so far. As for pairings, I tend to lean towards Daniel. Just gotta love a hot smart guy. Good work.
Comments from author:
He just can't. It's what I love about his character and I think it pairs well with Daniel because he can get Jack out of trouble with his level headedness. I know Daniel is hot and smart and he just gets hotter as the seasons progress.
Review By [alexceasar] • Date [1 Jan 06] • Not Rated
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