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Review of chapter "Miscast portals" from arkeus
Review:
kyaaa, Hermione slayer fic :-))))
Comments from author:
Mostly because I wanted a reason to steal the group. As for why not ginny or one of the other girls. Well I gave Hermione, Ginny and luna an equal chance and the dice I rolled told me Hermione.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [4 Apr 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Making Portraits" from Crayshack
Review:
This story is wonderful! This is by far the best fanfic I have ever read. I like the way you leave the door open in the story for all sort of worlds. I also like the way that you have found ways of including crossovers to other stories (Smallville and X-Men). I fully encourage further chapters and await them eagerly.
Comments from author:
I sort of like the idea of being able to go anywhere with the story or stories I write. Crossovers are often hard to write because you have to blend things that were never ment to mix. Sometimes it's easier then others. I liked the idea of Dawn opening portals to other worlds because it meant that they didn't have to have a history in common. I could pick and choose which characters I wanted from where. As for a big villians well they are already there. Wolfram and Hart as well as Voldemort are definately villains, I choose for the most part not to focus one them, they are busy crafting evil plans in the back drop.

As for my choices in characters to steal most of them are going to be people Dawn and Willow think are neat or interesting. This is because it was their spell that searched out or created the worlds they are stealing people from. As for powers this isn't really a super powered destroy the world level fic :) Willow has enough power from just what was seen on the show. As for Dawn she isn't ever going to be as powerful as Willow in most things. But she because she is the key will be better at spells that transport.

In other words glad you liked the fic, I'll always take crossover (world) suggestions if you want to offer them. Might not run with them but I do try.
Review By [Crayshack] • Date [3 Apr 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Wizarding Porn" from ChaoticFred
Review:
I love the way you're going with this story. I wonder if Harry will need to get a shrink after seeing his mom naked. lol
Comments from author:
Oh I'm sure at some point :) But until then he is going to enjoy having friends and slightly less danger then normal. As for the mother thing I sort of felt like I had too. It was such a great idea I couldn't not use it. Besides it's one of those no win situations, he gets a chance to talk to his mother for long periods of time but she isn't really dressed for talking with her son. I find this story is a lot about balancing on the tightwire of good taste. Besides there has to be something causing Harry anxiety. If their wasn't then he wouldn't be Harry. Thank you for the review.
Review By [ChaoticFred] • Date [26 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Truth or Dare" from jwcreator
Review:
I'm enjoying your story update soon.
Review By [jwcreator] • Date [16 Mar 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Lemon drop" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
MY EYES! THEY BURN! MAKE IT STOP!
Comments from author:
Shrugs, not everyone likes every story. I'm not all that worried about it. As for the grammer and such it does get better as the story continues. If the only thing you have to say is a stupid my eyes burn, without saying why maybe you need to not write reviews.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [13 Mar 06] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Arrival at the Burrow" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Oh good Christ, I was actually brave enough to move onto this chapter. I'm sorry I did. It's just as bad as the last one, and that takes some doing. If you're going to write a story and get bored halfway through a chapter and start just flinging out dialogue, STOP WRITING! If you can't be bothered to write the entire story properly, it shouldn't be posted.
Comments from author:
I looked at some of your writing, I can't say I'm impressed but that's my choice not to read it. As for the dialog well I am trying to improve my writing skills. Doesn't mean I'm always going to win. Have a good day though.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [13 Mar 06] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Practical Transfiguration" from ctvwarren
Review:
Excellent
please post again soon.
Comments from author:
I posted again, hopefully you like it. I'm always happy when I get reviews.
Review By [ctvwarren] • Date [5 Mar 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Practical Transfiguration" from PrimitivePixx
Review:
I think you have a lot of great ideas. But it might be too many ideas for one story. I've read thru, and its interesting but with all the twists, the plot disappears. Perhaps scale it down a bit?
Comments from author:
Scaling it down a touch is probably in order though, there aren't too many chapters left before I start a few different fics to continue with the story. And yeah I'm sort of at the edge of the my sanity for the different characters. I figure the wedding is going to be a chapter, then dealing with Illyria, after that I'm figuring the big fight, then maybe a slight wrap up. Thanks for the review.
Review By [PrimitivePixx] • Date [2 Mar 06] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Miscast portals" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Oh God, I can't even make it through the first paragraph without my soul hurting. I should have known not to touch this based on the summary. We got the lesbian trio (not that there's anything wrong with that), that becomes a duo when Willow goes to hump Horny Potter, who will then go see exactly how much of Ginny Weasley is covered in freckles? Or at least that's what you're listing as your intentions in the summary. Gahh, I say. GAHH!
Comments from author:
Yeah well I can see how you could get that from the first chapter. The pairings aren't really how they are written. Think sperm donor, and you have a better idea of Harry's involvement with the rest of the girls. I'm not offended that you choose not to read my story. I've read a lot of stories I can't stand as well.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [2 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Target practice" from TheRubyGoddess
Review:
The dialog needs more work, and the grammar and spelling are definite issues which distract from the plot. It's too hard to concentrate on what you are trying to get across as a plot line with the distractions.

Otherwise, the premise is interesting, and with work, will be a fascinating read.
Comments from author:
I'm trying to work on those details, sadly I'm not an English major. I'm using these fics to work on my writting. I'm hoping that the spelling checkers and Grammer checkers are going to help. I do the best I can, sadly sometimes it's not enough.
Review By [TheRubyGoddess] • Date [24 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Collecting a soul" from aelfheim
Review:
>>"Well things are going well with Adam, I like him, I haven’t found out that he is a mass murdering psychopath, yet. So that is a nice change from some of my past boyfriends." [ Snicker ]

Poor Buffy. Not the best dating history: Dead - user - boring - dead - death! I wonder when she's going to find out.

Nice having a little more Willow / Clark back story as well, even if it is only in passing.
Comments from author:
I tossed around quite a few ideas on which immortal to use. From some strange demon like thing out of Buffy, to various immortals in other books. But in the end I came up with close to the same thought as you. Buffy for all her power is sort of cursed in the love department. So the idea of a sarcastic immortal just screamed Methos. I figured in a world with no other immortals, (him being in the Buffy verse was in my world, a result of Glory's portal sending him back in time in a different world.) he would not be so nervous about the supernatural finding out a version of what he is. I'm just glad that the character is sketchy in Angel so I can fit things in.

As for when is she going to find out, probably not until or unless he gets passage back to his own world. As far as him going back, it isn't set in stone either way. I'm leaving his returning to his world as a choice to be made later. If he does go back it's not happening for a while.

I'll work some more of the Willow Clark story in some place. I'm still trying to do that whole it's a crossover thing and the characters don't exist in the other world. So coming up with reasons and explainations that don't fail because of that fact is hard at points. The Buffy/Smallville thing is also the only real crossover part in my fics. What I mean is that they are the only two worlds that sort of got mixed. The rest of the crossover things, of which I plan a number are dealt with by them being seperate worlds reached via portals. Long story short I'm working on it.
Review By [aelfheim] • Date [8 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Bad Andrew, bad doggy" from Kneazles
Review:
This is an intresting read. Instead of the usage of origional characters for the new worlds they visit, it might be better to use other established worlds or even points in time. The fluxations in time make it seem more realistic. Looking forward for more
Comments from author:
I actually had planned on using characters from established worlds, I used Lexie because I needed a nice computer tech and haven't actually read anything for cyberpunk in the last 5 years other then some game books and a general idea of the world. As for the dnd characters I don't plan to use them much, but they worked nicely to fix Lupin's lycanthropy. I figured after almost 30 years of being one that it couldn't just be cured. Besides what's the fun in curing it. So hopefully now that the setup is done I'll be able to work more towards pulling in some characters from established book worlds. I don't have any plans to finish the hp side of things for a long while, it's sort of built to just hold. Hopefully I'll also be able to do a few fights and such things before too long.
Review By [Kneazles] • Date [24 Jan 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Summoning rituals for storks" from Wormbait
Review:
Overall a nice story. Feels a little rushed at times but I like the plot idea and it has some memorable moments.

A few points: Anya is spelt Anya not Anaya.
Also don't you think breeding people just to be servents is a bit unethical, basically breeding slaves? Not to mention there would be nothing that would make them loyal, even with the house elf DNA, especially since you just finnished saying that an unemployed house-elf was not really trustworthy. How about just asking Dobby to find some trustworthy friends of his who would like a job?

One last thing, hope you don't get too carried away with the original characters, things tend to get too Mary-Sue'ish when that happens. Grim is already starting to look like 'super powerful I can do anything' girl. Plus the was you have set this up there are just so many established worlds and characters out there for you to pick from.

But anyway, I'm enjoying this so thanks for writing, can't wait for the next part.

Chris.
Comments from author:
As for breeding a house elf family for helpers yeah that might be a tad unethical. Also something that Hermione would have some issues with. I didn't say an unemployed house elf was untrustworthy a character did.(I believe) As for Grim she isn't super powerful and also she isn't going to stay around in the story. She should be making an exit rather soon in fact. I should be posting the next part soon. Thank you for the review. As for the spelling Anya wrong I thought I had checked the spelling on all of the names, I'll try harder next time.
Review By [Wormbait] • Date [23 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Miscast portals" from RedDeathLV
Review:
This fic right off the bat rubs the reader the wrong way.

You identify every who speaks by listing their name before their dialogue. That's a BIG no-no. You're writing a fanfic, not a script. Let the reader follow along with who's speaking, and work the dialogue into the story.

As it stands, this is readable, but just barely.

Either changing it to prose or flat-out adapting it into a full-blown script by adding stage directions and sound effects would be a very good thing to do.
Comments from author:
I did go through my other story and fix a large amount of the names for places I thought it was clear who was talking such as only two people talking or a character taking an action in there. As for the the rest of the names I'm working on cutting the number down in later chapters but for now just grit your teeth and push through.
Review By [RedDeathLV] • Date [17 Jan 06] • Not Rated
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