Large PrintHandheldAudioRating
using
 paypal
Twisting The Hellmouth Crossing Over Awards - Results
Is your email address still valid?

The Prophecy of the Four

StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking
Review of chapter "A Call to Arms" from Frogsareevil
Review:
Oh my God!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Best chapter ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You see the exclamations marks, it is majorly exclaimy. JKR so needs to bow down to you. You have muggles finding out and starting to do things because you have to have muggles finding out about things and doing stuff!! Aww. Just wordless. Ok not wordless, as if you continue reading you will see.

First off sorry that i didn't review sooner, but i had exams which are now over (another reason for the exclamations).

Also you need to make the muggles fairly powerful, well you don't but you should. One thing i always disliked about the muggle world according to JKR was that they were so oblivious and weak. No, no, no. We have guns and nuclear weapons (both which should be illegal and destroyed, but still their existence is still there) We have armies and scary people who run about flashing badges at other people. A wizard has to say a very long winded curse to kill someone, a muggle can shoot someone, an unless you have super quick speed which these wizards so do not, you can not dodge a bullet.

Also update soon, i know it is a very boring comment but you really need to update soon.
If Dawn is an old one (which since she is the Key she should technically be) then she should also have the eye flashing when the Crucio comes. Also she needs mocking references to Malfoy especially ones that include Billy Idol and she should try to persuade him to watch the Real World and when she gets introduced to Voldie she needs to say something about how he's the the wannabe which she has heard so much about and we all know Dawnie for her chipper-ness. she needs to be chipper - it might disturb some people especially if she puts really cute phrases in and say that she knows a really good therapist who could work wonders about the insecurity he feels about his parents.

Ok, actually, on second thought, please ignore all of the above. Way to Disney, but the mocking still needs to happen, because one can never have too much mocking, its like a rule or something.
Comments from author:
Lol, wow. Just wow. Thanks for the amazing review. I don't really want to give anything away, but judging by your comments I think you should like the direction I'm going to take this fic in. After all, the Buffy crew may be used to dealing with supernatural stuff, but they're mostly 'Muggles' (I use that word very, very loosely when refering to them) at heart. And Buffy has been known for using unorthodox methods when dealing with powerful demons (ei. the Judge).

There will be more of Dawn in the next chapter, but for now she's not really going to be doing much of anything. Oh, and the eye flashing happened when Angela woke from her nightmare, not when she got hit with Crucio. The thing with Crucio was that she managed to neutralize it (sort of) and recovered from it very quickly.

Um, the next chapter is actually done, but I'm waiting for my betas to look it over. So, hopefully it'll be out in the next week. Again, thanks for reviewing!
Review By [Frogsareevil] • Date [21 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Encounters" from APS
Review:
Great story,
keep up the good work.
Review By [APS] • Date [19 Jan 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Setting the Stage" from (Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
A very intriguing story, and I look forward to more. One nitpick - it's "horcrux," not "horocrux." You might want to correct previous chapters on your next update. See http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Horcrux for more complete details.
Comments from author:
Oh my gosh - I can't believe that with three of us going over this story, no one picked that up. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll definitely make sure to go back and change that the next time I update. And, of course, spell it correctly from now on, lol.

I'm glad you like the story. The next chapter's started and I'll try to get it out as soon as I can.
Review By [(Recent Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [31 Jul 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Setting the Stage" from arkeus
Review:
ouch. Willow is ocming in, bu dawn is in trouble, and they have been pretty stupid for the whole thing. I mean, they *knew* there was some memory mojo going on, so why didn't they check the slayers ?:/
Comments from author:
Umm. . . 'cause they haven't gotten to it yet. . . No, wait, now I get what you're saying. Hm, I guess it just didn't occur to them. I mean, all the people that have been affected by the "memory loss" - and having said that remember they only have a vague idea of what's going on - have been normal, everyday people. Giles has only just come to the realization that magic is being used more extensively. Hope that makes some sort of sense.

In all honesty, it didn't occur to me just like it didn't occur to them :P I mean, the wizards are good at what they do, after all.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [28 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Glimpses" from arkeus
Review:
well, it did get better as time ran on, though i am kind of disappointed by the focus on the ancients (Dawn, illyria, angela) and the lack of willow :/
Sniifff
Comments from author:
Oh, there was a previous review from you. . . heh, I'm reading them in the wrong order. Um, the ancients are an important part of this story, but once the action gets going the focus will turn more to other characters. You could think of this part as an extended prelude, I suppose.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [28 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Setting the Stage" from (Past Donor)TraceyC
Review:
I like your story so far, and appreciate the 5th Doctor references - good to see another fan!

Interesting story line and it's entertaining so far.
'

Tracey
Comments from author:
Thanks, glad you like the story! And yay for Doctor Who! Especially the 5th one - Peter Davidson is "my" Doctor. Love the new ones, but he and Tom Baker will always be the quintessntial Doctors. :D
Review By [(Past Donor)TraceyC] • Date [24 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Setting the Stage" from jupitersdaughter
Review:
Explosions! What fun!
Review By [jupitersdaughter] • Date [24 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Setting the Stage" from malaskor
Review:
Very nice story, I'm looking forward to seeing how it goes on.

Just one little nit-pick:
It shouldn't read "Ich fand das Handtasche..."; instead it should be "Ich fand die Handtasche..." (or imho better that way: "Ich habe die Handtasche (von Dawn) gefunden")

But that little bit aside a good story, the plot is moving forward at a nice pace, not too fast and not too slow, and the characters are well captured. That slayer in captivity is an interesting OC, I like how she slowly becomes aware of her "slayerness" through the dreams, but so far can only unconsciously use her abilities... to chop carrots :)
EDIT: Though looking back at the previous chapters she seems to be an old one, regaining her memories - hmmm... maybe an old one having ended up in a slayer's body?

Keep it up.
Comments from author:
Hmmm, you know how you write something down and think it's right until someone points out that it's not and then you're like "of course, duh!". Yeah. . . Why did I think it was "das Handtasche" again? Thanks for pointing out my mistake.
As far as the longer version of past tense (which I am actually more familiar and comfortable with), I thought that was a more formal form and used in writing more than in actual speech. . . Either way, I guess I need to bruch up on my German. Thanks again!

Otherwise, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I was worried for a bit I was moving things along too slowly and it would turn people off, but I really needed everything that's happening to happen. And I'm also happy to hear you like Angela. I'd love to comment more on what you've said about her, but I don't want to give anything away. It'll be a few chapters before she figures out who she is (and then another one before the readers do, lol).

Thanks for the review!
Review By [malaskor] • Date [23 Jul 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Setting the Stage" from superbrutal
Review:
Its been awhile sense your last update, but I'm glad to see that your still writing.

I'm glad that the Prime Minister was able to at least tell off Fudge, cause someone really needed too.

I look forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
Yeah, it has been a while, hasn't it. . . Hopefully the next chapter will be out faster. And stayed tune for more Prime Minister-Fudge interaction. I just couldn't stand how Fudge treated him in HBP. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [superbrutal] • Date [23 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Encounters" from Frogsareevil
Review:
Wow, this story is quite different from others i have read, but then again the best ones usually have some individuality to them. I like the idea of the prophecy - it is very buffyworldish, Joss Whedon would certainly approve. I like Angela, although the act that she is the Death Eaters servant seems slightly degrading, if she is an 'old one' she should definitely comeback and do some damage. Even if she is a bad guy, because they made her to servant work, old powerful creatures are in general terms not minions. Also just pure randomness here, but is Dawn one of the old ones?

I like the fact that you have Spike and Illyria bonding going on (not in the 'i proclaim my love for you' bonding, i mean bonding like 'i will no longer rip your spine out' bonding, in an altogether semi-friendly way) , even if she/he/blue girl does not agree.

So, as a result to my semi-coherent review, i will now tell you very clearly that you need to update. This is obviously going to be a long-term story kinda thing, and you can not leave us poor pathetic reviewers hanging around. It is just not right. It's mean and evil and morally wrong! But then that is according to me and i have been told many a time how wrong i am on such matters, and i will stop talking now because it is extremely annoying and apparently off-putting but there we go.

UPDATE!!!!!!!! You see the exclaimations - they mean something!!!!! there we go again!!! wow, this could go on for ever, ok shuting up now.

P.s. sorry, but i write like i speak, most people find it extremely annoying.
Comments from author:
Lol!! Your review made me laugh. .. and actually you remind me a lot of a friend of mine, so I don't find your way of writing at all annoying.

As for Dawn and Angela. .. well, I don't really want to come out and say anything just yet. I mean, Angela could be something else entirely (damn, I just got a great idea for something I could've done. .. oh well, too late now. . ). I will say this much: remember how Voldemort found out she had absolutely no memories of anything other than the last couple of years. . .

I'm glad you think the story's different - actually to me that's the highest praise of all :D I aim for originality. And keeping true to the original works, so I'm also glad you think the prophecy's Buffy-esque. And the next chapter's actually already done; I'm just waiting for my betas to finish with it. Hopefully, that means I'll be able to update by the weekend. . . Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [Frogsareevil] • Date [6 Jun 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Encounters" from (Past Donor)TraceyC
Review:
Very nice so far... hope you're better...


Thanks for the story so far.

T
Review By [(Past Donor)TraceyC] • Date [6 Dec 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Glimpses" from kkf
Review:
Great story build up so far! Can't wait to read more.
Review By [kkf] • Date [5 Jul 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Glimpses" from oberon
Review:
Very good and very omimous. Good build up so far.

Though it is a bit obvious that three of the 4 Ancients are referring to: Illyria, Angela and Dawn. The fourth is a complete mystery at this point.
Review By [oberon] • Date [3 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Discoveries" from EricThorsen
Review:
Quite an interesting story... I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this variant.
Comments from author:
My first review!! Reviews make me smile. Lol! Glad you think the story's interesting. Hopefully I won't disappoint with where I do take this. The next chapter should bring a few more. . um. . .interesting twists.
Review By [EricThorsen] • Date [7 Apr 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Decisions and Discussions" from rayningstars
Review:
This story is quite intruiging, and I'm curious about Angela. It's safe to say I'm very excited for more.
Comments from author:
Angela is my very own special surprise for a bit later on. Glad you're excited and I'll try to finish the next chapter as soon as I can. Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [rayningstars] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
start back Page: 15 of 16 next end
StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking