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Daniel's Daughter

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Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from LMiC
Review:
I like the story a lot. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Review By [LMiC] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prolog" from KevinSchultz
Review:
Hey - In general, I agree with the other review. It's an interesting setup (Daniel being the father), the writing is generally in-character, and it seems to flow well. As such, take the following critiques as not particularly harsh, but just some things that I noticed:

1. The letter - the writing and flow feels a bit stiff and expository. It feels like a plot summary, rather than letter someone would write to their soon-to-be abandoned daughter.

2. The timing feels contrived - how it is all this stuff is happening at the same time feels forced. The central element of the story seems to be the (unexpected) relationship between Buffy/Dawn and Daniel, and Daniel/Buffy's desire to have a father/daughter relationship contrasting with both parties unusual jobs and bad experences in just those kinds of situations. Which is a great theme, IMO: the fact that Daniel lost the letter feels completely natural for his character to do. However, the stuff about Buffy having to go talk to the General that just so happens to be Daniel's best friend on just the same day(?) that Daniel rediscovered the letter seems superfluous. It's a plot thread that (at this time) doesn't seem to add to the central theme of the relationship.
Review By [KevinSchultz] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from SaiyaSith
Review:
Excellent tension, great plot, nice innovation. In other words, keep up the fantastic work!
Review By [SaiyaSith] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from CindyB
Review:
Really cool! I can't wait to read more.
Review By [CindyB] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from hilarydilarydoc
Review:
Most "I am your father" crossover stories with Stargate involve Jack O'Neill. I really like the idea of Daniel Jackson being the father this time around. I'm also laughing at the idea of the first meeting of Buffy and Daniel (academic English meets SoCal babble). Please write more Soon!
Review By [hilarydilarydoc] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from CPTSkip
Review:
What a delightful beginning to your story. Excellent job with everyones' characters and I like you dialog. Now we get to look forward to Buffy meeting both Jack and Daniel. Yay! More, please?
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from PaBurke
Review:
*Happy Dance*
I am so glad that you decided to post on TtH. Your stories were one of the main reasons that I visited FF.net ever.
Keep up the good work and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story.
Review By [PaBurke] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from kizunakat
Review:
cool story. cant wait till everyone meets. love kizuna
Review By [kizunakat] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from LurkerOOl
Review:
Really like the way you are starting this. Looking forward to seeing how everything works together. This feels like a longer story, and I really enjoy those. Believe it or not, we one time got a letter delivered that had been languishing in a mail room for a year.
Review By [LurkerOOl] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Recent Donor)kribby
Review:
I read this on ffnet. I hope you have more to say now... I hope someone provides you some inspiration from their reviews.



-K
Review By [(Recent Donor)kribby] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Interesting idea. I'll be keeping an eye out for the next instalment
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [27 Feb 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Dogfire
Review:
love the story, can't wait for more.
>^_^
Review By [Dogfire] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from MLove
Review:
I am *so* glad you brought this story over to TTH. It is one of the few stories on FFnet that I checked for updates. Love it. More please.
Review By [MLove] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from RachelleRyan
Review:
I think this story is exceedingly good and deserves many more a chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [RachelleRyan] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from gabbygal
Review:
very interesting take on the buffy's dad thing, looks really cool, hope you write more, great job.
Review By [gabbygal] • Date [26 Feb 06] • Not Rated
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