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Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from SwimmieTeam
Review:
That was really good and I can't wait for more. You need to learn to close your tabs. The last chapter was in bold. A / before whatever it is will close it. Kinda like this
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review it is always appreciated and I am glad that you like it.

Sorry about the tab thing but I have this story up on 3 different sites and I can never remember which site I have to do what for. The problem being that I can't use the same legend to differentiate between languages and dreams and telepathy for all 3 sites since they don't all accept the same methods I use. I hope that makes sense.

I am halfway on the next chapter and have the other chapters written but I think that I may have to do two different versions of Chapter 18 on because I am not sure if everyone will like my preferred version.
Review By [SwimmieTeam] • Date [21 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from divaslayer
Review:
I love this story so far. It is awesome. Please, please, please, please, update soon. Please?

Dani
Comments from author:
Firstly thank you for reviewing and letting me know what you thought and for the high compliment.
Don't worry I have had the rest of the story after the next chapter written for quite a while, but having said that I am having trouble getting the next chapter just right. I am also starting to review the rest of the chapters and want to change a some things in them to make them better.
You will be happy to know that the last chapter is also half written, I think that there will be around 25 chapters in total.
Review By [divaslayer] • Date [22 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from (Current Donor)romero
Review:
Thanks for the very nice chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for letting me know that you enjoyed it and hopefully I'll have the next slightly shorter chapter up soon.
Review By [(Current Donor)romero] • Date [18 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from Keshkreature
Review:
Aww, this is a very sweet fic. I'm tremendously glad that Dawn got to go back to Middle Earth with Buffy. And that the baby will be ok.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your comments, I was wondering if I had made Legolas too much of a wimp but decided that he was also under the influence of Buffy's emotions through the link as well.

As for Dawn, that was not planned originally it just sort of happened and it seems to be working well because she gives another perspective to the love story between Legolas and Buffy.

In regard to the baby there is still another 6 months to go and this is Buffy we are talking about, so stay tuned.
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [31 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
Oh how darn sweet. That was a wonderful chapter.
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review I am glad you enjoyed it, as with the rest of this story it is sometimes so hard to get the right balance between too fluffy or not emotional enough.

You will be happy to know that the next chapter is already partially written so there will not be such a long wait for an update. The rest of the chapters up to the last two have been written for quite some time so once the next chapter is up the updates will be much more frequent as I am hoping to finish this story before October.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [31 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from TGirl
Review:
i almost started to cry reading this story. you have done wonderful work and i hope you well update soon. plz finishes this great story.
~TG~
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for taking the time to review and your kind words on my work. Have no fear I will finish this as it was begun as a gift to a dear friend. Chapters 17-22 are practically finished, but I am just having a little trouble getting my thoughts for chapter 16 down as it will require some crafting to get it right and I do not want to disappoint anyone who is reading this.
Review By [TGirl] • Date [4 Jun 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from spk
Review:
I am so happy to see this update. I was scared the story was going to be abandoned. Beautiful reunion between Buffy and Aragorn. You do an amazing job with each character's emotions. I could experience Dawn's fear and relief as she cried on Aragorn's shoulder, and I could feel Buffy's terror as she couldn't sense Legolas. I LOVE the brother/sister relationships between Buffy & Aragorn and Aragorn & Dawn. Can't wait to read more. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for your encouraging review it is much appreciated. This chapter and the previous one have been the hardest to write.

In fact I already had a chapter 15 written but chapter 14 ended up being quite different from what I originally had planned so I have had to do some rewriting to accomodate the change in direction. I was a little reluctant about putting this chapter up but really wanted to get the story moving again. So I am really pleased that I still maintained the characters reactions which I strive for at all times.

I must admit I really enjoyed writing the scene between Legolas and Dawn and there will be more of this to come as well as more brother/sister interaction.

Fear not I have no intention of abandoning this story and if I had to I certainly would let everyone know.
Review By [spk] • Date [22 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from spk
Review:
This story is just so beautiful. I love the way you depict the depth of the love between Buffy and Legolas. I also love the sibling relationship between Buffy and Aragorn (and now Dawn). I can't wait to read more as the healing and reunions continue. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review and for the wonderful compliments. I am most gratified that you think the story is beautiful and that I have captured the relationships well, as that is really at the heart of the story if you'll pardon the pun.

I have worked extremely hard to make the conversations and interactions as believable as possible and will continue to do so. I actually love the idea of the sisters having an older brother around to care about them and for Aragorn to have sisters that see things in a different way to him and look out for him just as Legolas did.

After all having an older brother or younger sisters has a way of keeping you grounded in stressful situations and also helps in the healing process.
Trust me Buffy and Legolas will heal and a reunion will take place with the companions of the Fellowship.

Please continue to let me know how I am doing so I can write the best story I can.
Review By [spk] • Date [30 Jul 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
excellent chapter. I would love some happy fluffies with Legolas and Buffy being better and good and stuff (and more romance) very much looking forward to the rest.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your positive comments it means a lot because this was without doubt the hardest chapter so far to write. I really wanted to make sure I got it right as it sets up the rest of the events of the story.

You didn't mention your preference to a detailed or summarised version of the events on the quest after it left Lorien, so I will take it you don't have one.

Don't worry this was always going to be about Legolas and Buffy first and foremost so there will be happy fluffies coming up. I am looking forward to adding a bit more romance once they have recovered. Can't have them being romantic and causing their senses to overload again, can I?
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [14 Jul 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from jammiesMM
Review:
Cool update. I am glad she is back in Middle Earth and that Dawn is with her. I do hope they get better soon. It is too bad Buffy didn't get a chance to talk to the others but then again that could have caused alot of stress that she didn't need so maybe this way is better. Thx for posting
Comments from author:
Thanks as always for taking the time to review, I am glad you liked it as I had so much trouble trying to write it.

I realised early on that I just couldn't write a big goodbye scene for the Scoobies, despite it being important to the story.

I also knew that the reunion scene was more the focal point, so I was keen to do it justice. Buffy and Legolas have always been the central theme especially the various aspects of their relationship and how it affects others around them.

I also wanted to explore the bond aspect as well, again within the context of the consequences. Plus add some extra depth to Galadriel and Celeborn. I am not sure if I should actually include what actually transpired between them and our golden couple. I personally think that I pretty much already spelled it out anyway.

I hope you liked Spike's reward it seemed to be appropriate considering the role of apples so far in this story. They seemed to be the most likely thing that would be easily available in both worlds.
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [14 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from fairieangel
Review:
This is a really great story! I hope you update again soon!
Comments from author:
Thank you for taking the time to review and welcome to my story. Thank you also for the compliment, it always amazes me when I get them.

As to the update I am currently on draft no. 7 or 8 of chapter 14 as I don't want to put it up until I get it the best it can be. So please be patient and I will do my utmost to make this the last draft.
Review By [fairieangel] • Date [15 Jun 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from CharmedSlayer
Review:
Very Nice

I am liking the way this is heading... I do like the Legolas and Buffy pairings
I would love to see Legolas come to the human world and see Buffy and her friends, I think it would be really cool if he met Angel
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review and welcome to my story. I like Buffy/Legolas pairings too, but there doesn't seem to be that many on this site.

As far as your other comment is concerned, please appreciate that it is difficult dealing with so many characters and having them in two different realms It is mainly for this reason that I didn't include Angel in the first place, although I had been thinking of doing a side story dealing with Buffy's letters which of course would include the one to Angel. Besides there are other stories around where Legolas has met Angel.

However I am currently working on another story which has a Legolas/Buffy Pairing where he will meet Angel so look out for that in a few months time.

This story is about Buffy and Legolas and their past and future together. If I was to accomodate your request it would have to be in the epilogue or in a sequel, both of which I will consider further down the track.

I hope however that this will not put you off continuing to enjoy the story.
Review By [CharmedSlayer] • Date [23 May 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from jammiesMM
Review:
Cool chapter!! I liked the Buffy, Giles and Dawn talk it was nice that no one really got upset or anything. They are all being "grown up" and rational. And I could just about strangle Legolas and is idiot sense of honor. Hope Buffy or if Dawn goes with her gives him a good talking to or maybe Aragon will do it instead. Because somebody sure needs to talk some sense into that boy. Anyway keep writing thx for posting
Comments from author:
Sorry for delay in comment on your review, I actually thought I had already done one. Anyway thanks as always for the wonderful in depth review.

Yes I actually found that talk easy to write as it seemed a natural conversation to me. As for that boy Legolas, well we all know how honourable he is and that too seemed to be the kind of reaction he would have.

As for someone giving him a good talking to well I can't say about that without spoiling the next chapter.

Hope to hear from you again after that.
Review By [jammiesMM] • Date [20 May 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
With Giles I meant when kind of how he was so nervous about waking into the kitchen because Buffy was there then how he was worried about finishing telling her about being able to go back. it is kind of funny he thought she would be angry she rarely gets choices of her own.
as for the letters I would love to hear about them. It could be in this one if it works with the story line or if not a companion piece.
Comments from author:
Thanks for getting back to me, I had thought of doing them as a companion piece because the next chapter follows on immediately from where this chapter finished.

It may be possible to put them in Chapter 15, I am not quite sure how much of the Scoobies people want to see. However having said that, they will be bowing out of the story in the next couple of chapters anyway.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [20 May 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Review:
It sounds like the pain at the end was coming from Legolas a broken heart? Silly elf he is her family now. I really hope that Buffy will be made immortal like the elves when she is sent back to Middle Earth so she and Legolas can go to Valenor together forever. Looking forward to the next chapter. (Oh and I liked Giles surprise when she told him about it)
Comments from author:
Thank you as always for taking the time to review. The pain was in his head but it might have been triggered by his heart. I agree with your comment, he is silly but is a little confused at the moment.

As for Valenor I will consider that for later in the story, however if I do let that happen then I would have to allow Dawn to go to.

I was not sure what your last comment was referring to unless you meant her wedding.

As mentioned in this chapter, Buffy wrote a series of letters and I would love to hear from you whether you want to know about what was in the letters now or later or in a different story.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [20 May 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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