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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from ForTheJoy
Review:
This is a great story. I especially like how Dumbledore used the Patronus Charm to get rid of Darth Willow.

The only suggestion I would make is, you might want to consider using a beta reader. I'm guessing English isn't your native language from the type of mistakes in here, so it would be helpful to have someone look over your grammar and word usage.

Thanks for sharing your story!
Review By [ForTheJoy] • Date [8 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from mulligas
Review:
You should write a sequel to this story.
Comments from author:
I'm not going to add a sequel. First I don't know where to go with the story and second I'm busy with my other stories (all unfinished)
Review By [mulligas] • Date [15 Feb 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Bobboky
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awesome, poor poor Aurthor though
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [10 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Proof? Magical Ritual?" from Sterling
Review:
I tried to continue reading this and just couldn't...It could be a really fun story. However the amount of errors you have in this thing is really just to much for me. One of the first tenants of writing is, know how to write. Study up a bit on your english skills and you will find a much more appreciative audience. Good luck, in regards to your future endeavours.
Review By [Sterling] • Date [18 Jul 06] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The next day, house call" from Sterling
Review:
This is a cute little story so far. But you have some big problems with editing. For one thing you keep calling it the wizardry world when it is the wizarding world and all other kinds of grammar and word usage mistakes keep popping up all over the place. I am not trying to be mean here. I'm just informing you that the english in this story needs to be improved quite a bit. You can have the best ideas, have great characterizations and plots but without a proper grounding in correct english any story can turn to ash. Give your chapters another once over and/or find someone who has good english skills to edit your work.
Review By [Sterling] • Date [18 Jul 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from SnapeDog
Review:
Very good story, well thought out plot, could have been a bit longer, that said, quite enjoyable.

Oberon, The culture of the wizarding world depends on the wand, they would no more break a
wand than we, in Britain would punish a pickpocket by removing his hand at the wrist, where every
action from tying one's shoe's to cooking a meal depends on a wand, they would be horrified at the
thought, therefore no such spell would ever be created.
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There has been some mention of spelling in some of the reviews, may i humbly (as some one who is dyslexic)
suggest this little pluggin for IE, either google IeSpell or save time and go to www.iespell.com, its free.
Review By [SnapeDog] • Date [5 Jun 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Erica
Review:
Great ending. It just smells of 'Sequel'.
Review By [Erica] • Date [23 May 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from banner
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I only wish Fudge actually got a spanking...
Review By [banner] • Date [23 May 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from angrymonkey
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That was one of the best Harry potter fics I've read, despite the 'super Willow' it avoided most of the annoying MarySueisms.
Review By [angrymonkey] • Date [22 May 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from VillageOrchid
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An intersting conclusion. When they find out her past, perhaps there will be a sequel? Like maybe assigning her a tail?
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [22 May 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Keshkreature
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Hehe, stupid Fudge.
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [21 May 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Naitch
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Nice little ending to the story. I only hope we get a sequel that brings everybody back together again.
Review By [Naitch] • Date [21 May 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from BenTulsa
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i really liked this story. i will miss not seeing more but it ended with a way to have more so i will hope for more and if not will be glad with what you have given so far. thanks for it and hope to see more.
Review By [BenTulsa] • Date [21 May 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from TarnishedGold
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::Chuckles softly:: I can just picture Fudge sputtering & whining. I love the break the wonds thing. excelllent story.
Gold
Review By [TarnishedGold] • Date [21 May 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from MistofRainbows
Review:
I liked the wand breaking spell. I've wanted to break Fudges' wand a number of times and stuff it up his a.. well you get the picture. I feel bad for Aurthor Weasley about the broken wand but sometimes the splash damage boils over. Besides that I'm sure Fudge will tap into the ministry funds to replace the wands as he wouldn't want to pay for it himself.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [21 May 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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