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Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from azulkan
Review:
I absolutely loved this fic. Can hardly wait for more. I'm a Willow/Severus gal myself but even Willow and Spike is good. Not so much with the Willow/Angel though. Very eagerly awaiting the next part.
Review By [azulkan] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Pearlmegan
Review:
Please add more soon!!!

Pearlmegan :)
Review By [Pearlmegan] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Moderator)KaylaShay
Review:
Okay, so I read chapter one and while you have an interesting premise it doesn't seem well put together.

Time and location was jumping around. Buffy was telling Willow to be back soon from England like Willow was leaving at that very minute, then Willow said not till May. Next thing we know, she is at the platform and then meeting back at a house they all have in England... Where did that come from?

The Spike/Willow interaction was confusing and Willow seems to be a Buffy-as-Cheerleader one minute, her normal self the next and then some uber-wiccan with a little dark mojo in her the next...

One big nit-pick is the use of Will's in the dialog. For example, in the following sentence:

--- She smiled as Dawn yelled, “Thanks Will’s!” ---

Grammatically, Will's is possessive. It's use would indicate that Willow, called Will for short, would be in possession of something or someone. For example, Will's book.

If you want Willow's nickname to be Wills, then please take out the apostrophe...
Review By [(Moderator)KaylaShay] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from PhilH
Review:
I'm enjoying this story a lot, although I do wish there had been the scene with Dawn's first Potions class with Snape. (eg)
Review By [PhilH] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from blackcanary
Review:
interesting. can't wait to find out what happens next. please update soon.
Review By [blackcanary] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from TarnishedGold
Review:
Excellent premise. I love Spike & willow's interaction. IF we get a vote I vote Willow/ Spike pairing. I still think Joss made a mistake in not following them up. Can't wait till Dumbledore finds out who he's protected by. Keep up the good work.
Gold
Review By [TarnishedGold] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Fooo
Review:
While this is certainly interesting, I have no idea what is going on. I'm not even sure of the amount of time that has passed during the fic'. As others have said, formatting and a beta could do wonders with this story.
Review By [Fooo] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from MistofRainbows
Review:
ouchie, parts of the story are sort of painfully hurried. The spacing could use some work as well. It's still interesting it just feels hurried in places. Please keep on writing though. Please dear lords not willow/snape. If you have to have willow be with a guy use angel. Better yet have willow and dawn hook up before snape. Shudders.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from oberon
Review:
Just one thing I want to say.


[Return] Key, use it.
Review By [oberon] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Kinda sweet and mostly clear. The part with the extra two wands that Willow floated over and purchased (?) not quite visually clear enough for me the follow. Giles and the next chosen at the hellmouth? Faith? I like how Willow is sure enough in her magic that she (at first) doesn't even seem curious about the Wizarding world or their magic. But it is likely that she'll learn the lore and the methodogy along with Dawn. So that's kinda interesting. Looking forward to what you do next.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from banner
Review:
That was an interesting and different Buffy/HP setup.
I like the way you've integrated Darth Willow with our Willow to make a balanced and in-control person. Pity we lost Tara, though - she was a complex sweetheart.
I'll be looking for more of this one.
Review By [banner] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from oldscout
Review:
I tried reading the chapter but couldn't. You really need to reformat. Paragraphs should be separated by blank lines and when people are having conversations, each new speaker gets a new paragraph. I know it takes up more space but it makes it a lot easier to read.
Review By [oldscout] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)LisaF
Review:
Please, please, PLEASE get a beta reader who understands the basics of spelling and grammar. "Will's" means "Will is" - and the way you use it at the beginning of the chapter doesn't make any sense. I didn't get past the beginning of the chapter, because the grammar kept making me twitch.
Review By [(Past Donor)LisaF] • Date [27 Mar 06] • Rating [2 out of 10]
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