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Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from raxadian
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Xander is gonna have a really big family...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: Dark Discoveries." from raxadian
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Well, that would explain some of Buffy Jerk attitude after she was revived...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from raxadian
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Wait, so Diana is Faith haft sister?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [25 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5" from raxadian
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Wait, didn't she get the tittle of Red witch way later than this?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from raxadian
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Ah yeah, go for it super boy!
Review By [raxadian] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from raxadian
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Yeah, I totally forgot I got a magic power up, yo!
Review By [raxadian] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from raxadian
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So, you will do like Smallville and have his powers slowly develop?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue and Chapter one" from raxadian
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Ah yeah, very smart X!
Review By [raxadian] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from Balder
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I loved this story when I first read and I still do upon reading it again!
Review By [Balder] • Date [6 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from wswords
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You do realize that Xander is acting so OOC here it isn't funny. You might be doing it on purpose because getting superpowers could plausibly change someone on a subconscious level, however this change is not just sudden and severe, it is total I can't see any of cannon Xander in your version except fighting the good fight. Having taken a sneak peak at a random chapter later (chapter 8) it seems you are not actually going anywhere with these changes, which would have make your story interesting if not actually good.

You are also throwing exposition at the reader in the laziest way possible to change cannon to be how you like it. I am not condemning you for changing cannon there are parts of the Buffyverse that are just down right stupid and should never been there in the first place, but you shouldn't just change it and condemn the characters involved in it as being stupid. And even if you do that, which is a valid choice, it is never acceptable to throw it at the audience all at once with no context or pacing. Good writers don't just give out details a little at a time to keep it interesting, it is because audiences generally refuse to accept so much new information at one time.

I know this is a bit harsh, but I wouldn't tell you if I didn't see signs that you could improve.
Review By [wswords] • Date [21 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Zarohk
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“I never understood why she slept with Fang. Sure he's handsome and all but there's got to be heat there otherwise he's nothing more than a giant walking dildo. Plus he smells like a corpse, a very fresh one but still a corpse.”
I find this ironic, since one story that delves into Faith's issues says that she "considers other people as nothing more than flesh-covered dildos" with her "Get some and get gone" attitude.
Review By [Zarohk] • Date [29 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from gaulty
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Great story, bye
Review By [gaulty] • Date [26 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from ozftw
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Enjoyed the story the second time around as much as the first
Review By [ozftw] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from TheFoxBoss
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*Sniff* The last omake of this chapter was so beautiful. *Sniff*
Review By [TheFoxBoss] • Date [16 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 22" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
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You live up to your name! Love the story!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [19 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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