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The Child of Rao

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Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from LadyFoxFire
Review:
So when is Buffy and Willow going to start to notice anything? A long time from know I know
Review By [LadyFoxFire] • Date [13 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from DaBear
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LoL, Xanders got some 'splaining to doooo! :) Had to look up who Rao was on Wikipedia, other then that this is great.
Review By [DaBear] • Date [13 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Rob
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Very good part. Nice job building the friendship with Faith. But would be nice to slowly get back the friendship of Willow and even Buffy down the line. Maybe even make Wes useful and present a united front against the Council if needed.

Rob
Review By [Rob] • Date [13 Jun 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Sunstar
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I'm liking this very much. I enjoy how you are writing this, I don't know exactly what it is that I enjoy, but it's going good. I do know xanders thoughts and the dialog of the story is believable, and the breakdown of the friendship.
Review By [Sunstar] • Date [13 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Current Donor)SusanAnthony
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I like the way Faith and Xander are developing into friends. And I always had a weakness for intelligent Xander. I really like this story and look forward to the next part.
Review By [(Current Donor)SusanAnthony] • Date [13 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from djhardim
Review:
Good chapter.

Couple of observations:
1. Be careful of how far you take Xander's powers. It will probably take a couple of years before Xander's powers to build to the level of Superman's. With any luck, he might be able to leap a building at a single bound by the end of the summer. At this stage, any major use of his powers may tax his reserves. At the very least, the low level field emitted by his body should cut down on his cleaning bill.

2. Don't forget about the Initiative. As close as Xander and Faith are living to the UC Sunnydale campus, there's a chance that they may attract the Initiative's attention.
Comments from author:
That's true, but I'm considering that the Justice League took place after the Batman and Superman animated series respectively. In the superman series a general of Zod was up for parole from the Phantom Zone and she ended up gaining full powers after a couple of weeks. Right now Xander has a great deal of defense and some strength. While we don't know how long the Initiative had been active I think it's safe to assume they weren't keeping track of the individuals in Sunnydale. They were pretty half-assed if they weren't keeping track of the Slayer, thinking her a myth if anything.

You are right about the reserves though. Also I figure I could incorporate some of the Smallville routes of power development or discovery. The headaches for X-ray vision, Lusty heat vision and having time slow down on him. He's already unconciously using a bit more speed than normal though.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [13 Jun 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from OrneryFife
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Definately enjoying this DC/Xander twist. Should be interesting to see how Xander 'accidentally' discovers any other abilities. Looking forward to seeing the group deal with the new Zeppo upgrade. Update frequently.
Review By [OrneryFife] • Date [12 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Unbalanced
Review:
Cool story. I hope that after the speech Xander gave Giles that the watcher grows a spine and actually tells off Buffy the "no brain" slayer. Also, if Xander can use or understand magic he should use it on Buffy,Willow and Deadboy to find out the truth about their behavior and what not. I mean if Buffy were to find out that Deadboy really wasn't that heroic as she thought he was, could spice things up or if Willow was found out to have placed a lust spell on Xander to satisfy her own selfish needs and to gets some conceited notion of revenge for Xander not picking her over Cordy. Anyway great story hope to read more to see where you take this.
Review By [Unbalanced] • Date [11 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Sunstar
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I love the bomb part, and im enjoying this.
Review By [Sunstar] • Date [11 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from brokenangel
Review:
Nice chapter addition. I really hope Willow gets found out for using magic on Xander to break up him and Cordy. Because there is no way in hell that Xander would purposly cheat on Cordy with that flat chested, sheep known as Roseburg. Also as a note when Xander discovers his powers I hope he robs the Underworld blind and sets up a place for Cordy and Faith hopefully he can save Faith from herself and Cordy from IRS, self esteem issues,etc. Great story.
Review By [brokenangel] • Date [11 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue and Chapter one" from brokenangel
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Nice crossover idea. Xander becoming a child of Rao, I guess that would make him and Clark brothers sorta. If I remember my Superman history correctly Rao started the line of the house of El. I think. I hope Xander gets some Krypton tech knowledge because if you have him vist Clark then when ever the whole Brainic SNAFU takes place he could whip Brainics ass.
Comments from author:
Kryptonian technology is what destroyed them in the first place. In this version, Rao left his home pantheon because the Kryptonians had forsaken him for technology and forgetting the ways of old, long before Brainiac had been created. There's a whole history of what exactly Rao did to earth and an example of how some earth realm gods emulated some of his actions later on but never gave him credit for it. You'll see what I mean later on.
Review By [brokenangel] • Date [11 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Sadfru
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Slow and easy wins the race...then agian, superman can race around the planet in under an hour or so that may not be the est expression to use (super speed and it's something like that, I just geeked and remembered a race between the flash and superman so if you keep the abillities the same...) which is another point, won't the powers be over kill when they grow or are you altering them to suit the environment? great story and hope for more soon :)
Review By [Sadfru] • Date [10 Jun 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Dragonhulk
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This is really shaping up nicly, keep it up.
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [10 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from ChaosRonin
Review:
heh nice transformation. Hmm i hope Rao either explains to Xander or already gave Xander the explanation and its waiting for him to access it
Review By [ChaosRonin] • Date [10 Jun 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Rob
Review:
Looking good. And nice to see you writing again, been awhile.



Rob
Review By [Rob] • Date [10 Jun 06] • Not Rated
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