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Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from NaiveGhost
Review:
I just found this story yesterday. I really, really liked it.
I always thought Faith deserved a second chance at a family. I also like that she was a "little Anita".

;-)
Review By [NaiveGhost] • Date [6 Dec 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dirty lil Orphans" from FoundSerenity
Review:
THis Story was really Funny I really liked it when they burst out crying....they are a little young for what your saying if they where 21 when they went through the they should be 11 not 5 if they where 10 years younger....but KEEP WRITING IT'S GREAT!
Comments from author:
OVER ten years younger, lol. Thanks for reading!
Review By [FoundSerenity] • Date [24 Nov 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Long the Bridges Falling Down" from (Past Donor)Ponder
Review:
I really wanted to like this, but I can't get past the poor formatting. You've got extra line breaks all through this, making it impossible to enjoy. Please fix the formatting. Two carriage returns after each paragraph, and the wrapping will be automatic for the readers.

EDIT:
I thought I was pretty clear.
You've got alternating long and short lines like I'm typing in this example to you. It looks terrible and is distracting.
This paragraph I'm writing SHOULD be one big block of text, but instead it's this ragged thing that's
hard to read. That's because I've inserted a bunch of unnecessary carriage returns into this message. Remove all the line breaks
in your story chapters, except for 2 after each paragraph.
Comments from author:
well im sorry that u didnt, whats 'Two carriage returns after each paragraph, and the wrapping will be automatic for the readers.' mean? sometimes when i copy and paste the formatting gets shot to hell, but ill fix it best i can...
Review By [(Past Donor)Ponder] • Date [22 Nov 07] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Long the Bridges Falling Down" from Susangel
Review:
OMG!!!I totally worship you now!!!And you know what?I had never read anything about Anita Blake and I could totally understand your story,and I....LOVED IT!!!
I loved that the girls have an opportunity of being children again,specially Faith,as she is my favorite character,and that way she can be as "weak" as she wants...I think you wrote them pretty well,and I can't wait to read the sequel so...Thank you so much for writing and sharing this wonderful,awesome,amazing story!!!See in the next story XD
Comments from author:
thank u!lol wow lol im glad u liked it! check out have faith its the next installment in th ltb series
Review By [Susangel] • Date [18 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from (Past Donor)Aomizuoko
Review:
Love it, absoulutely love it! I can't wait till the next chapteras of your other two stories. You know, its dark now, and when I started reading it was Dawn....Oh well, it was well worth missing a day for. Thank you for writing!
Comments from author:
omg! lol thank you for reading! i love that i could hold your attentions that long lol
Review By [(Past Donor)Aomizuoko] • Date [30 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from Alinora
Review:
This was a good story. Early on, I was a bit confused about who's POV we were seeing, but I read your comment a couple chapters back and I think it did get better after that. It was hard reading about what happened to Faith, but she's 5 years old (or at least in the body of a 5 yo) and it's to be expected that she's not going to be able to do everything she could as an adult. There's probably a good reason Slayers aren't Called until they're ~14.
I liked seeing Willow, Faith and later Cordy get a chance at a real childhood. I don't think any of them really had it all that great growing up and, while it's sad that they've been "erased" in their world, in a way this could be a bit of a reward for them, giving them a chance for a family and a happier life. Good story, interesting premise! :)
-Ali
Comments from author:
thank u for such a long review! im very glad u liked it :D that chapter about faith gave me some problems cause i wasnt sure it was such a good idea but it just came out and it made sense, dont ya think? thanks for reading.

Ali
Review By [Alinora] • Date [7 Mar 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from GoddessNyx
Review:
Nice story. It's cute. The slayer healing should have fixed the limp, or so I thought.
Review By [GoddessNyx] • Date [19 Feb 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from angelus
Review:
great story would have liked to see adult Faith but it was funny to see Faith as a kid have adult reactions to Anita's relationships one last thing the Powers need to butt out this isn't the first story in which the Powers That Be have pissed me off royally acting all high and mighty it will disrupt the balance screw that oh there have been several times during the course of Buffy and Angel that I wished I could have jumped inside the screen and said look this isn't a good idea do this instead The Powers would have hated me royally probably would have tried to have me killed too
Comments from author:
I have a whole series dedicated to the Anita Challenge and the new ones feature a teenage Faith, the newwest one will have all the girls in their last year of high school, thanks for reading!

Ali
Review By [angelus] • Date [18 Jan 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from (Current Donor)softly
Review:
Well, it's wonderfully written, and I can't critisize the story; but I didn't like it all too much. I became so involved in it, with the characters, I prefer to be more detached. I do not think that Faith was fully in character, but the challenge of writing a five year old Faith is more than tough. Though I would have liked to see Anita (and company's) reaction to an adult Faith/ Willow/ Cordelia, I think you ended the story beautifully.
Comments from author:
Thank you, lol, this is a series and the newer ones feature older Delia, Willow and Faith. Your thoughts are appreciated and so glad you liked it!

Ali
Review By [(Current Donor)softly] • Date [1 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from Ansku
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Awww, they are adorable :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [13 Nov 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from Karone
Review:
This is a wonderful story. Thanks for writing it.
Review By [Karone] • Date [27 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from carmsfic
Review:
Wonderful story. It made me laugh and tear up. Just great!
Comments from author:
thank u so much! :D
Review By [carmsfic] • Date [2 Oct 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from SaiyaSith
Review:
Excellent! I love it! Great story, fantastic job!
Review By [SaiyaSith] • Date [4 Sep 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from Wise
Review:
Actually, nobody ever called Cordelia 'Delia.' It was either 'Cordy' or it was 'Cordelia,' but never 'Delia.'
Not a bad story, though.
Comments from author:
i know they didn't i thought i clairified that Delia getting dubbed Delia was from Nate, i didnt want the same nick name as Angel and Buffy, i wanted something different.
Review By [Wise] • Date [28 Aug 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "London Bridge is Falling Down" from zili
Review:
aww this was such a great story. i wish there was more. maybe a sequel? please
Review By [zili] • Date [6 Aug 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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